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The Clare Glens

By Callanan  
Counties Limerick & Tipperary separated by the the Clare river

Tags: Ireland Tipperary Limerick Landscape and travel Clare glens Mark callanan

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24 Dec 2015 3:01AM
Strictly speaking, your large signature distracts from the beauty of your photo.

Peter
tonyguitar 8 77 37 Canada
24 Dec 2015 4:19AM
The signature could be made almost transparent to fix things. Otherwise this is an excellent composition. TG
dudler Plus
17 1.4k 1775 England
24 Dec 2015 5:28AM
Hi, Mark -

I don't recall seeing your work here in the Critique Gallery before - so first, welcome!

Peter and Tony have commented on your logo, which is exceptionally large. Anything inside the frame that draws attention away from the image tends to be a minus point - that's the top and bottom of it.

You have not got any EXIF data here, which is helpful both to analyse any problems with settings, and also for less experienced togs to see, to help them understand what makes an image work when they look through the Galleries.

Without that data, it's possible to see that you used a slow shutter speed (the movement of the trees in the wind is a giveaway), so it's clear that you used a tripod for the shot, and probably had the lens stopped down quite a lot to get front-to-back focus. And it's a fair bet that you used a reasonably wideangle lens for this, though not absolutely certain.

Compositionally, this has a lot going for it. The path on the riverbank leads the eye into the picture on the left, and then it slides across the bridge, before coming back down along the river. The weir, the large stone on the near bank, and the foliage on the left all add to a resolved and complete feel.

I can't help feeling, though, that a slightly lower viewpoint would have worked even better. The branches at the top right obscure the bridge a little, and those on the left spoil the sightline to the top end of the path. A little higher and they would have framed the shot nicely without interfering with the overall structure.

Maybe a slight crop on the left would remove 'dead' space: you don't always have to stick to the format of the sensor.

A final couple of queries - I'm not sure, but it seems possible that there's a slight tilt to this - I rotated my mod a degree clockwise. Does that work? Am I mistaken? It's hard to tell.

And is the saturation a little high? In my mod, I tweaked the yellow and green saturation down a little to give a less acid, Fuji green than your original post. However, this is a matter of taste, i know!

It's a lovely location, and your picture makes me want to be there - to sit and enjoy the view, maybe to spend some time reading and shooting pictures when the mood takes me. You've set out some of the geography of the place in a way that's very appealing indeed. One of the aims of a good picture is to show others the appeal of a person or a place, and you have succeeded very well in this. Thank you!
paulbroad 13 131 1290 United Kingdom
24 Dec 2015 8:11AM
Dump the logo. It ruins any effect. Otherwise a nicely composed scene but over exposed by half to one stop and we have no data of any kind to go on. Was it a phone? Probably not, more likely an attempt at the milky water long exposure effect.

That tends not to work well when there is a lot of vegetation that will blow in the wind resulting in quite large blurred areas which pull the eye. Better, here, a carefully calculated exposure with tripod and faster shutter speed.

Paul
banehawi Plus
16 2.4k 4200 Canada
24 Dec 2015 2:12PM
Hi Mark.

Its a nice scene. I like the point of view.

It appears to be a longish exposure by the appearance of the water, and some apparent movement in the leaves of a tree, but without the exif data its a guess.

Perhaps a touch brighter can be effective? I get the impression that it needs a small rotation CW, but it may well be an illusion due to a couple of visual sues and the angle.

Ive uploaded a mod showing what I mean.

Regards, and happy Christmas


Willie
pamelajean Plus
14 1.5k 2189 United Kingdom
26 Dec 2015 4:25PM
I'm very impressed with your composition, Mark, and it was a beautiful time to take a picture of this scene, with the colours of the autumnal leaves.
The walkway invites the viewer in and through the image to listen to the sound of the falling water, to be at peace.
The river also takes the viewer's eye along, under the bridge and beyond.

The tree canopy top right is very dark, out of focus, and quite intrusive. I wouldn't have included that.
The crop that I have done in my modification eliminates some of that canopy, making it a little less intrusive. I also cropped the left where there is little of special interest.
I used the burn tool on the bridge structure, and tree and sky behind it. The sky is bland and bright, another eye-catciher.

These are fairly minor alterations or suggested improvements to an already excellent image.
Callanan 14 7 Ireland
4 Jul 2016 9:57AM
Thanks for the feedback all.

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