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Seaside colours

By cathsnap
Just trying to achieve a feel good photo for summer. It's been quite a while since I took my camera out for a spin so probably lots of room for improvement. Haven't edited this at all in any way.

Tags: Landscape and travel Seaside beach

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dark_lord Plus
17 2.8k 778 England
8 Jul 2017 8:58PM
Welcome back to the Critique Gallery Caherine.

This is an attractive scene and says summer to me.

The first thing that struck me was the amount of empty foreground. The shingle detail is nice to see but at almost two thirds of the image it's too much. Those buildings are quite interesting and i'd like to see more of them. By going closer you can do that and still include the shingle. You may have to use a different lens though.

You've focused on the shingle so the buildings are out of focus, which is a useful technique and I have used it myself, but it often needs a wider aperture (so the shingle stands out) and a focal lenght of 55 mm isn't going to produce the differentiation of out of focus areas that'll make the image stand out.

My first mod just levels up the image. The small part of the horizon that's visuble as well as the vertical walls of the buildings show up theat the image needs a small clockwise rotation.

My second mod tries to replicate what a much wider aperture would produce with a narrower depth of field. This would be similar to using you lens at 200 mm and at a viewpoint much further back - the buildings would be the same size in the fram but there's be much less shingle in frame and you'd be focusing on one narrow plane.

My third mod roughly shows what using a wider angle lens might produce, again at a wider aperture.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.9k 2434 United Kingdom
8 Jul 2017 9:28PM
One of the most interesting and challenging aspects of photography for me is to share the experience of 'being there'. You could feel the breeze, you could reach out and touch the pebbles. How to convey that to someone who is just looking at a 2-dimensional rectangle on a screen...

I like what you are trying to do. This is about capturing the experience of the moment. You got down low to exaggerate the foreground shingle, make it immediate and tactile. But there's just too much of it proportionally in the frame as it stands. The bank of shingle becomes a barrier.

However there is no rule that says that you have to stick with 3 x 2 landscape. I've uploaded a letterbox crop, I also did a bit of gentle dodging and burning on the pebbles. For me it conveys the feeling without creating a barrier.
Moira
salopian 9 3 28 United Kingdom
9 Jul 2017 8:23AM
Certainly gives a good feel of summer - a "wish I was there" picture ! I can feel those pebbles scrunching under my feet.
Seems to be leaning to the left ( horizon sloping) so have rotated to the right and also adjusted the levels slightly.

Geoff
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4253 Canada
9 Jul 2017 3:57PM
Make a painting put of it and take advanatge of the out of focus features. Like the mod, maybe with a different frame.

Its like the adage, when life gives you lemons, make lemonade!
11 Jul 2017 7:57PM
Thank you for your comments, very helpful. Great mods.

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