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By cedaray
This is my first attempt at taking a portrait. used bounce flash . all comments will be appreciated.

Tags: Portrait Flash General Danielle Portraits and people Flash and lighting

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This photo is here for critique. Please only comment constructively and with suggestions on how to improve it.


27 Jul 2010 2:21PM
Hi, I think this is a great attempt, probably one of the finest attempt. For me it is excellent looking image but as I too not perfect in portrait so can't comment in confidence but anywhich way I liked the concept the background, the presentation and a very pretty looking model.
Great attempt.


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banehawi Plus
13 1.8k 3878 Canada
27 Jul 2010 3:19PM
A very good first effort Ray, and a good attempt also at a high key effect.

As Frank mentioned above this can look better with a less central placement in the frame.

I would also suggest a little more contrast. and I would not burn away as much of her hair as in this ****. For me, - a personal opinion, it gives a slightly ghostly, floating impression.

Having said that, many portrait shooters would be quite happy with this.

I have included a mod with my suggestions.

Hope this is helpful,


chensuriashi Plus
11 279 17 England
27 Jul 2010 3:26PM
It is a top portrait and will be great in a frame wherever the eyes are, processed fine I am going to try to get this Hi Key effect on an old shot soon as I can...Thanks for the inspiration...Chen.
paulbroad 10 123 1242 United Kingdom
27 Jul 2010 8:26PM
The image, as a high key portrait is well done and pleasant to view, but high key portraits should have full tones in the eyes, and her eyes are very washy -- looking a bit strange to me. A pity as the vignetting and eveything else is great.

No one elese seems to have commented, but look at the pupils, they should be black, and they are a number of shades of grey.

cedaray 9 1 United Kingdom
28 Jul 2010 9:01PM
Many thanks for all your comments which I find very helpful,
Thank you.

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