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This has come out pretty well but it's underexposed and a purist will tell you that your composition's all wrong. Whilst the eye contact is good, with catchlight's, her position indicates that she's heading out of, rather than into the frame. Also the space to the right seems unused. All of which is subjective of course. At least she's on a third!
I've uploaded a mod in which I've adjusted the exposure and added lifted it slightly using curves.
I've also cropped it to a portrait as an alternative.
Hope this helps.
Bren.
I've uploaded a mod in which I've adjusted the exposure and added lifted it slightly using curves.
I've also cropped it to a portrait as an alternative.
Hope this helps.
Bren.

This could be so nice and, for me, your composition is spot on - excellent. You have made the basic error of under exposing by at least a stop and the flash has failed to fill. You were at 190mm, which suggests you may have been out of flash effective range if it was the camera mounted gun. Also, off centre composition, good though it is, will have effected the flash calculation on auto, although I would then have expected over exposure.
Paul
Paul

Thank you all again for you time and input, I think the exposure being under is my processing, i shoot everything in raw and in processing the image i took the exposure down a bit to what i thought would give it a more dark look, for the feel of the image i wanted. I re-processed it after your comments as i agree it does look too under exposed and have uploaded the new version into my portfolio, again thank you for your comments and critique

Ive read what you intended above, and I think the concept of the darker shot may work if you graduate the darkness across the shot from right to left.
Ive loaded a mod with this done, - basically corrected exposure, then used a grad filter, while decrasing exposure on the left, and then applied a little diffuse glow to enhance the lighter areas.
Do you think this works?
regards
Willie
Ive loaded a mod with this done, - basically corrected exposure, then used a grad filter, while decrasing exposure on the left, and then applied a little diffuse glow to enhance the lighter areas.
Do you think this works?
regards
Willie