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By debbiehardy  
Another from my shoot with this aspiring model. Comments/critiques more than welcomed!

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keithh 19 25.8k 33 Wallis And Futuna
9 Sep 2005 5:24AM
couple of things really...lose the 1980's ripped jeans...and think about the pylon behind him.,,and I'd just get in a bit closer with a larger aperture.
chrisfroud 17 521
9 Sep 2005 5:25AM
Have to agree with Keith, neither the ripped jeans or pylon are a good look! Definitely need to focus in closer on the model. Also, the pose looks a little stiff and rigid - try to encourage them to relax a little.

User_Removed 17 32 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 6:19AM
Agree abut the pylon Debbie, but he could have ripped his jeans on the barbed wire fence behind him!
mellyleth 18 212 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 6:24AM
I must admit, I nearly bypassed this shot due to the location, which is not really doing the image any favours. However, your model is posing well, good eye contact and the exposure and sharpness is good. I have done a drastic mod. I wasn't keen on the barbed wire fence but didn't really have time to clone that out. Personally, I thought black and white suited well.

A good looking model though, definitely potential there. I agree with Keith too about using a larger aperture as it would've blurred out the background a bit and made it less conspicuous. Hope you don't mind all these suggestions..!
debbiehardy 18 363 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 6:38AM
Definately don't mind any suggestions - everyone has something valuable to add.

Michael and I took around 100 shots and we chose to upload this one because of the location.

We wanted something a bit different - but it's good to get feedback to see if people think it works or not.

I'm going to carry on with this series of shots over the next couple of days.

Thanks for the mod. to look now!
debbiehardy 18 363 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 6:44AM
Hi again, I like the b&w and the crop. Michael's most pleased with your comments, btw!!
mellyleth 18 212 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 6:51AM
Thanks Deb, glad you like it. In my opinion, I think your main problem was the pylon and not zooming into your model enough.
debbiehardy 18 363 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 9:07AM
Thanks for the mod Ian. Are you thinking for a CD?
tull 19 181 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 9:08AM
Certainly a great pose and foreground Debbie but must admit I do find the pylon lets the shot down..sorry mate.

debbiehardy 18 363 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 9:15AM
Very interesting to get all the different opinions.

I posted this a couple of days ago, and got advice re using ripped jeans and industrial backgrounds which we've tried here. Just shows that you can't suit all of the people......

The one who matters - Michael, the model loves the shots and is buying a Graphibook, so I'm very pleased with the outcome Smile
ginz04 18 281 20 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 9:35AM
hi debbie for me the pic is definately model on rocks - barbed wire is going through his head and agree about pylons.

Model with potential. ian
9 Sep 2005 9:47AM
this is well cool mum!!!!!
gorf 18 16
9 Sep 2005 1:18PM
Oh, so this is the reason I haven't seen you all week?

The penny drops!

I agree that the barbed wire shouldn't be going through his head (despite being jealous) but I quite like the Pylon in-shot. And someone needs to tell the kids round here that ripped jeans, pastel colours, labels and the music from the 80's are all out of fashion, because they seem to think they are coming back in!
KBan 17 512 4 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 1:46PM
i like it!!!!
Mavis 20 143 2 England
9 Sep 2005 1:47PM
Think you need a few close ups and see the whites of his eyes sparkling Debbie . Mmmm young man !! Let me at him . LOL only joking . xx
debbiehardy 18 363 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 1:48PM
Thankyou, Mark, Ian, Tom Gareth and Keith for comments...all appreciated.
debbiehardy 18 363 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 1:50PM
Oh, hello Mavis! Thankyou...look out for a close up tomorrow!
No swooning allowed, this is strictly professional lol!
Mavis 20 143 2 England
9 Sep 2005 2:02PM
God I can't wait for his Twin if you take them together it will be more than I can stand !! LOL . Still I might die happy Smile xx
debbiehardy 18 363 United Kingdom
9 Sep 2005 2:10PM
Nowthen Mavis!!!

Michael's following this thread with interest lol!!
billydo 19 79 United Kingdom
10 Sep 2005 12:39AM
I like the location as it is Debbie, but thought the pose looked a little awkward..? As you've said though, it's what the customer thinks that really matters.
PatriciaWilson 18 617 58 Greece
12 Sep 2005 4:14PM
have to agree with Mellyleth, sums it up for me.
You've done a great job with your model though, he seems to know what it's all about...but at that age they know everything, don't they Smile
helly 18 1
18 Sep 2005 8:18AM
Hi Debbie
I think the pic is a good reflection of modern youth culture, doesn't matter where they are they are always caught with their feet up! Just joshing. Nice pic, but he should lay off the sun bed at his age.
I'll take a look at work and see if i can find any of the fashion reference books we use that might help you with ideas.
debbiehardy 18 363 United Kingdom
18 Sep 2005 2:48PM
Thankyou, Neal, Pat and Helena. Debbie.
scotpics 18 23
20 Sep 2005 6:43AM
Before I read all the comments my thoughts were that I'd have cropped it round the model and the rocks to give it a 'rougher' look that went better with the torn jeans. Mel has modified it the way I would have too had I done it myself.

Model needs to do something with that hair (though that's just a personal thought), but I've had a couple with similar hairstyles that I photographed but didn't like.


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