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Outside

By emefbee
ISO 200

1/160th sec @ f1.8

Aperture priority

Adjustments to contrast, converted to mono, vignette added.
Marks/blemishes left in at models request. Hates too much fiddling!!

Tags: Black and white Portraits and people Nude and glamour

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Comments


conrad 15 10.9k 116
3 Jul 2008 9:00AM
Well, I'm not an expert on the subject of portraits, but I do generally like this shot, most of it works for me.

I like the pose, there's enough light on her, the mono seems to suit the scene.

I only have one minor gripe, and that's the window visible on the left. I think it attracts too much attention from the viewer. But other than that I think the image is fine.

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X_Pose 11 England
3 Jul 2008 12:13PM
Nice pose, well lit. I like the composition too. It looks as though she's waiting for her love to return... or hoping for some male attention in his stead ;O)

I disagree with conrad re. the window. I think the focus is soft enough for it to not intrude.

Nice shot.

Marcus
zarquon 11 47 55 England
3 Jul 2008 4:19PM
This is a good informal portrait that juxtaposes hard and soft. The brickwork makes an excellent backdrop to the soft white skin of the model. The skin in your rendition was fairly grey in colour and did not create an impression of feminine softness, for me, because tonally, it was too near the colour of the lighter bricks.

The amount of dark space, to the right of the model, would just possibly have been acceptable if she was very light in tone and you had created an effect of light within darkness (chiaroscuro). The window leading to the vignette where it fades into darker tones, is a competing area of interest and I opted to crop it. I also darkened the lightest brickwork a little because it is a competitive highlight that draws the eye away from the subject.

The heavy crescent-shaped shadow, under your model's chin, could have done with lightening. A reflector held just out of frame (possibly by your model) would have thrown some additional light into problem shadow areas and your model would have had a softer looking face.

The under-arm area needs to be minimised or made to look more attractive. Had the model placed her arm gently by her side (or at a less extreme angle) her armpit would have been less visible.

Overall... this is a very good documentary portrait. It contained a few distractions like the window, the large dark area and some competing highlights. You have used the wide aperture of your lens very well... to isolate the model from the brickwork and her eyes are sharp. She was rendered a little dark for my taste and the heavy shadow detail under her chin, needs to be addressed in future images.

Your portfolio shows that you have excellent skills with a camera. The darkening of images at the corners is one technique for bringing the viewer's attention to the subject. It will not suit subjects where there are too many composition elements in the frame. I really liked the image "*" and it demonstrates that you have no difficulty with 'seeing', photographically. I look forward to seeing more of your intriguing work.

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emefbee 13 116 England
3 Jul 2008 6:24PM
Many thanks to you guys for the comments, just what I was after!
I like the mod, Jeff and thank you for the detailed analasis and kind words re. my other stuff. I don't get to do much of this sort of thing but with a bit of practise and help from people on this site, I hope to improve. Thank you again.
Matt.B.
zarquon 11 47 55 England
3 Jul 2008 10:36PM
Happy to help where I can. Smile

Jeff

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