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As u wish

By fighterjockey
tried to work on patterns and colors both in the same frame.

Critiques are most welcome
thanks.

Tags: Still life General Architecture Close-up and macro

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baclark 12 3.7k 24 United Kingdom
3 Feb 2010 2:54PM
Love the bright colours and bold lines in this. The patch of light streaming through just finishes it off. Deserves many clicks. Great shot.
Barbara
davidhu 15 19 United Kingdom
3 Feb 2010 3:30PM
Works very well as a pattern shot, helped no end by the contrasting primary colours. I might shave a bit off the RHS to get the symmetry spot on. Also take off the thin sliver of beam at the bottom which I find a slightly distracting.
Dave
3 Feb 2010 3:52PM
Thanks a lot
Barbara
And
David
for encouraging comments.
Smile
NEWMANP 13 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
3 Feb 2010 9:51PM
i like the shapes and colours but overall there is a lack of sharpness.
part of me finds the shaft of light fascinating and the other half of me wants to flip the left side to make a perfectly symmetrical design. if the shaft of light was to be taken as the principle subject then i think it would be refered to in the title and probably the composition concentrated on the right side.
there is a lot i like here but something i cant quite button down stopping me from being too excited.

id say try the flip, tweak in curves to up the contrast and give the result a good dose of sharpening and i recon it could be a good bit stronger.
regards,
Phil
paulbroad 14 131 1293 United Kingdom
6 Feb 2010 12:38PM
Very well seen. Bump up the contrast quite a bit whilst selecting and protecting the highlights so they don't burn out.

Good.

Paul

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