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As u wish

By fighterjockey
tried to work on patterns and colors both in the same frame.

Critiques are most welcome

Tags: Still life General Architecture Close-up and macro

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baclark 12 3.7k 24 United Kingdom
3 Feb 2010 2:54PM
Love the bright colours and bold lines in this. The patch of light streaming through just finishes it off. Deserves many clicks. Great shot.
davidhu 15 19 United Kingdom
3 Feb 2010 3:30PM
Works very well as a pattern shot, helped no end by the contrasting primary colours. I might shave a bit off the RHS to get the symmetry spot on. Also take off the thin sliver of beam at the bottom which I find a slightly distracting.
3 Feb 2010 3:52PM
Thanks a lot
for encouraging comments.
NEWMANP 13 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
3 Feb 2010 9:51PM
i like the shapes and colours but overall there is a lack of sharpness.
part of me finds the shaft of light fascinating and the other half of me wants to flip the left side to make a perfectly symmetrical design. if the shaft of light was to be taken as the principle subject then i think it would be refered to in the title and probably the composition concentrated on the right side.
there is a lot i like here but something i cant quite button down stopping me from being too excited.

id say try the flip, tweak in curves to up the contrast and give the result a good dose of sharpening and i recon it could be a good bit stronger.
paulbroad 14 131 1293 United Kingdom
6 Feb 2010 12:38PM
Very well seen. Bump up the contrast quite a bit whilst selecting and protecting the highlights so they don't burn out.



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