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Where is he?

By Firebaby  
This images is from a series I undertook as part of a portfolio for an aspiring model. I was looking for something that had a bit of an edge and this is something of a departure for me from my comfort zone!

Contrasty? punchy? edgy? I hope I have delivered.

Tags: Fashion General Portraits and people Flash and lighting

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16 Dec 2009 10:35AM
Great image - well done !

Chris
Firebaby 17 1.2k Faroe Islands
16 Dec 2009 11:05AM
Thanks Chris.
wrinkles 12 351 United Kingdom
16 Dec 2009 11:28AM
This is a great picture,but I would like to see the lady more to the left of the frame.
accipiter 11 61 England
16 Dec 2009 12:18PM
Certainly edgy and well photographed. I would have thought a model would like to be a little closer for a portfolio but I'm sure you took other pics for her to choose from. A
Grampy 11 507 71 England
16 Dec 2009 1:42PM
Seems to me that she's too much in the middle of the image , You are trying to get too much into this shot, the bricks and blue background are great for two seperate shots but not together, so I afraid I have totally changed the crop, I have warmed the image a little and darkened the background a little .
Hope this helps
Phillip
CathR 14 151 564 United Kingdom
16 Dec 2009 2:51PM
I think Phillip is right, Andrew. There's a lot to like here. It does have an edgy feel. But what are you photographing - the model or the walls? I feel the walls are too overpowering here and my eye keeps on being drawn to them rather than the model. Placing the model on the join between the two walls adds to the effect. I would choose either one wall or the other, probably the red brick one. The model would likely disappear against the blue wall as it is so overpowering.

But all credit for moving outside your comfort zone. It's almost there but needs a bit more experimentation.

Best wishes

Catherine
Firebaby 17 1.2k Faroe Islands
16 Dec 2009 4:46PM
Thank you all for your really helpfull comments and thoughts they really are appreciated!
ade_mcfade 17 15.2k 216 England
16 Dec 2009 8:16PM
the lighting's fine - just need to have a think about the comp on these shots, the same rules apply for portraits as for landscapes, architecture etc.

so here you've got her a bit too central and there's too much space above her head - makes her look really small in the scheme of the shot.

you're on the right track though, so keep it up Smile
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4247 Canada
16 Dec 2009 8:53PM
While I agree with the comments above, there's something to be said for her alignment with the blue/brick transition where it could suggest shes between two minds.


I have loaded a number of mods, - some of which take advantage of that keep clear sign and turned her around, and one that keeps with your original title, where is he, and Ive applied some vignetting to darken the mood, and Ive corrected side to side perspective in some.

I hope this gives you some ideas, and you find it helpful,


Regards


Willie
kenraw 11 2 United Kingdom
16 Dec 2009 10:50PM
great shot, the lighting on the model is spot on. The compostion needs to be tighter on the model in my opinion an also position her more to the side of the frame. Also there is a tell tale sign from you flash on the wall creating a hotspot which I would clone away. Its a great location you chose. I love these urban shoots they are right up my avenue.
Ken
NEWMANP 13 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
17 Dec 2009 4:22PM
the colours are punchy and the background looks a good location, has a raw urban feel but it would have been nice to have more of a pool of light than such even illumination.
the pose is a bit static and looks more like she has a bad back, its the legs that look badly posed, better both feet together with knee out in a triangular shape.

im more concerned the composition is too split down the centre, that may be your intent to create tension, problem is the joint line down through the models head and the inbalance of colours, id have preferred a bit of blue door and more wall or move to the opp side of the door and have more door less wall. this sentiment seems shared by others as the mods all demonstrate this well.

id be interested to see more from this session, i like some of your straight portrait stuff by the way

best regards,
Phil
Firebaby 17 1.2k Faroe Islands
19 Dec 2009 12:19PM
Thank you a for your truly helpful comments. I'll take them on-board - thank you again!

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