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Boo boo be doop!

By johnnyboy114  
Last of Lisa for now, but have some other shots from this shoot that I might post. I have two other models shots from this shoot, so will post some of those too. Happy to take critique on this one as although on the surface, it looks pretty good, it just doesn't seem to have that "wow" factor. As do a lot of my shots. Any advice will be gratefully recieved

Tags: Portraits and people Flash and lighting

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This photo is here for critique. Please only comment constructively and with suggestions on how to improve it.

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sherring 9 46 13 United Kingdom
11 Nov 2009 4:23PM
I think that the problem is her elbow. My eyes were drawn straight to it and not her face. In that position it also makes her hand look ugly.

Just my oppinion though.

Steve.

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ade_mcfade 12 15.2k 216 England
11 Nov 2009 4:52PM
a tricky one - you want to minimise the size of the hands, get them edge on so you can see just the thumb or the little finger.

also, with the elbow slicking out, it's closer to the camera so looks bigger as a result

finally, she's a little too close to the rhs of the frame

but the lighting looks fine, I like the backdrop - just try to direct the model a bit more
richard20d 7 115 10
11 Nov 2009 4:53PM
Oh no here I go again. I to am drawn to the elbow for some reason unbeknown to me, and the hand does look a little awkward. I think the centre point to this image is the eyes, but the purple flower draws me away from the eyes. I really have no right to critisie as portraits and studio lighting to me is like baking a cake................No idea.
Perhaps you need some guidance from a portrait photographer and there are plenty of good ones on here. Try asking the guy from ambient life for a few tips he seems like a nice guy.

I hope this is of some use to you Johnny.
Geraint 10 715 34 Wales
12 Nov 2009 7:41PM
Good points regarding the elbow and hand. The main issue for me though is the amount of skin showing (her side and arms) - they're quite bright and are not in keeping with the subdued background (in my opinion). A lot of the problems mentioned could I think have been resolved had the model brought her right shoulder more round to camera and lowered the placement of her hand. This would reveal less skin on her side and reduce the angle of the elbow. It would also mean the elbow and hand would be further away from camera, thus not looking so large in the frame. Also, the tones of her skin differ a lot compared to her face, owing to the make up. The lighting is good though; perhaps you didn't need the light on the (our) right: maybe keeping her back in relative darkness would better suit the mood? Good work.
Geraint

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