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Cold day on the Beach

By gjfereday
Taken on a freezing cold day on beach. Again one of my first portraits with the DSLR. Any comments greatly appreciated.

Tags: Portraits and people

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Focus_Man 9 481 631 United Kingdom
6 Jul 2012 11:56AM
Similar in many respects to your last upload.

Compositionally I am happy but there are many more options available to you including 'portrait' format. However this is fine and can show a pleasing vista to the background. Yours has been spoiled by a couple of things, firstly the wonky horizon - always check this is horizontal before making thee xposure and afterwards as a double check. It is important and will always be 'pulled' in here if it is not so. Secondly, there are a number of little items around his head - one looks like somebody walking along and also there are a few boats. I would not prefer to see distractions like that as they pull the viewers' eyes away from your subject.

I have uploaded a mod where I have made the horizon level, but then decided to get rid of the beach line anyway as is caught your models head. I also got rid of the boats and walker at the same time. Finally I have brightened up your image a little and sharpened before uploading the mod.

I hope you can see the difference and thaty you approve.

Your EXIF is Ok but you could have used a wider aperture to make the background more out of focus - f5.6 or maybe even f4 but with critical focussing on his eyes.

Frank

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banehawi Plus
15 2.1k 4032 Canada
6 Jul 2012 5:39PM
One thing you should try to do is to force the on camera flash up in situations like this one. The boys face is underexposed, his eyes dark with no catchlights, so forcing the flash up causes it to fire a low energy pulse called fill flash that will give you a way better shot, - when you have selected Aperture exposure, and not Program only. Program will likely fire the flash at full power and ruin the shot.

Composition can be cropped in post processing, and Ive loaded 2 mods, one shows the landscape style, and the other a portrait, whcih is what you get when you hold the camera on its side, - the preferred method of taking portraits, hence the name.


Both are brightened, with eyes visible, and catchlights as if a flash had been fired.



regards



Willie
paulbroad Plus
12 131 1285 United Kingdom
11 Jul 2012 2:58PM
The basic composition is good, but .yu have a few faults. Counted some light in his face and flash fill is the obvious answer. The horizon has a slight tilt and i would clone out the object near his head. Face could be a touch sharper - may be net conversion though.

Cold it may be, but the result is a bi of a fed up expression.

Paul

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