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Pink African Violet 1

By JohanGrobbelaar
Too central a composition?

Tags: Flowers and plants Close-up and macro

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This photo is here for critique. Please only comment constructively and with suggestions on how to improve it.

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graceland 11 2.5k 2 United Kingdom
15 Jun 2009 4:03PM
I like It

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15 Jun 2009 4:10PM
Looks good to me
Mikaela
vickib 7 6 United Kingdom
15 Jun 2009 4:55PM
I like it as it is. They look like sugar flowers, they have a slightly forsted effect, very nice.
vickiSmile
Thank you for your suggestions sir. I agree that your #1 is definately an improvement.
shandoor 7 1 United Kingdom
15 Jun 2009 8:59PM
Beautiful shot wonderful colours great DOF very well done from a fellow South African
Alexa
Thank you Alexa, highly appreciated!
pamelajean Plus
10 951 1808 United Kingdom
15 Jun 2009 9:42PM
Hello, Johan. I commend you for experimenting with your control of the depth-of-field on your flowers, and also trying different compositions. Flower photography is such a diverse subject, each person has their own style of presentation, each makes their own effort to portray nature's natural beauty and colour in their own way. From looking at your portfolio, I see that you like to use shallow dof. The three Barberton daisies are nice images. This is very personal, but I prefer to see a lot less of the out of focus areas.
For me, this pink African Violet is spoilt by the large blurred area at the bottom. This is probably caused by your camera being too close to the petals at the bottom whilst you were concentrating on the centre of the one at the top. If you had shot this from above, still concentrating on focusing on the centre of one of the little flowers, the out of focus areas would at least be uniform and more pleasing to the eye. As it is, the eye falls to the blurred part, and graceland has effectively cropped this area off. Whilst still practicing with your flowers and dof, try to go for the flattest area and then later on you can experiment with angles and even closeups of the centres. You ask about the composition being too central, so you have realised that it is better to offset your chosen subject. Flowers don't run away or fly off, like some subjects, so you can spend time on your composition before shooting. Just one other thing, there is a burnt-out area at the top, so keep an eye on your light source and, if outside, choose a time of day when the light is less intense, to avoid this sort of thing.
Pamela.
Thank you Pamela for your considered and in depth critique.
Yes, I got carried away by the lovely softness of the oof colours at the bottom but see that it does spoil the overall effect of the photo.
This old codger still have a lot to learn!

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