Activity : Photo Comments

I like the colours and the simplicity of this image. Click.
John

Was it practical to include the tops of the nearest posts ? If so, why did you choose to exclude them ?

John

Ade, I saw the previous post and was bothered by the huge white patch on the glasses. I was going to suggest reducing the brightness of it, but when I tried that myself it just became a distracting grey patch. Perhaps cloning some darker parts of the lens to remove or reduce the size of the softbox might help ?

A realise that a tog of your calibre will not have overlooked this, so presumably the white patch doesn't bother you. But since you ask why people didn't click ... well, that's why I didn't.

I like the image otherwise. The B&W conversion, detail, exposure, etc, are great.

John

PS. A pic that gets stuck on 5 clicks isn't necessarily bad. Well, that's what I keep telling myself, anyway.

Lovely light and textures. Agree that the writing is distracting, but I'll click for the pic.

John

I love the colours and patterns. Click.
John

Very moody ! Great control of exposure in what must have been very difficult conditions. Click.

John

Very artisitic. I could see a print of this doing very well in national / international exhibitions (as could a number of others in your portfolio). I agree with others that it would also work well in B&W. Great stuff. Click.

John

Lovely treatment. Possibly her arms are a bit too light, but the rest is excellent. Click.
John

Excellent - I can't add anything that hasn't already been said. Click.
John

A very finely executed character study - it seems to say so much about her. Click.

John

Good composition. Good control of exposure too - it's easy to mess up in situations like this. Click.

John

A very accomplished portrait. Click.

John

I agree with Vince about the title. However the image does have a wonderful simplicity and sense of innocence to it. Click.

John

What beautiful tones. This image seems to havea clarity to it that is most appealing. Click.
John

Very graphic ! Click.

John

Instantly recognisable as yours, this is another excellent shot with that trademark precise control of exposure and composition. Click.
John

Excellent ! We get very few classical still life shots here, and even fewer that are top class. The composition, exposure and distribution of tones in this one are all spot on. Click.
John

An interesting idea but it doesn't quite work for me. There are very bright areas which are distracting; the parts of the gun that are in focus are too dark to see the detail; and the parts of the gun where the exposure does allow you to see the detail are out of focus.

If you have the necessary darkroom skills then I would suggest burning in the bright areas of clothing and holding back the dark areas of the gun. However, it may be easier and more effective to reshoot, this time arranging the lighting to direct the eye towards the intended focus of attention.

John

The use of the path to frame the model works well, and the pose looks natural.

It's unfortunate that the peak of the cap has cast her eyes into shadow and that there is hardly any detail in her hair - perhaps a reflector or a low power flash might have avoided this. Alternatively, can you rework the original file to bring out these areas ?

The sepia toning suits the theme well.

John

Well created ! Click. It's a shame that the thumbnail doesn't do this justice.
John

I like the lighting on this portrait. Unfortunately the picture is let down by a number of lightish spots and also vertical streaks down the picture. Is this a scan from a print ? If so, it might be worth cleaning the glass. Either way, the spots could easily be cloned out.

John

Lovely pose and toning - and an attractive model too. Click.
John

The treatment and toning seem to suit the subject - it certainly works for me. Click.

John

Beautifully done - can't add to the comments made by others. Click.

John

A lovely, sensitive image. I like the gentle rimlighting on the right-hand side of the model. If I were being really picky I might prefer that the model had let her hair down (more relaxed, natural); also there is a bit of noise in the shadow tones of the model, but if this wasn't in the critique section I would still give it a click.

John

Good composition and I like the way you have captured the oiliness of the connecting rods. Click.
John

The subject suits the mono treatment. Just a couple of suggestions ...

Asking the model to stand on her toes would have lengthened her legs a little and added to the "stretch" idea. And asking her to turn her hands slightly so that they were sideways on to the camera would have made them more elegant. Don't know how much control you had as it was a group shoot, but may be worth bearing in mind for a future session.

John

This is much stonger than yesterday's ! Click.

John

It's a great idea - food, desire, hedonism ...

Unfortunately, I think the red peppers sit oddly with the watermelon and, although the title suggests she has cake in her hands I can't really see quite what it is (apart from the cream). Also, it might be worth cropping a bit from the right of the image to lose the flare and help get the viewer closer to the girl.

But I do think it is an idea worth exploring further.

John

Very harmonious. I like the slight colour in the background, but you could use the curves tool to darken it completely if you prefer. Click.

John