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Hi, Kerrigan, and welcome to the Critique Gallery.
You've been a member for a few weeks, and this is your first upload here. In case you missed it elsewhere, the deal in this Galelry is that you don't get any votes or awards, but you will get feedback. The more focussed your description (and possibly questions), the better we can tailor our comments to your needs.
Here, you've simply said you're trying something different from colour - and I applaud that, as I use B/W a good deal, and even shoot and process monochrome film. It's a good medium, and puts the emphasis on form, shape, texture and light.
What I see is a nicely composed, technically sound picture, which has been quite heavily processed, including a dark vignette and softening at the top. That's a pity - the definition everywhere else is amazing, including the wires above the main suspension cables!
Looking at the histogram, you've completely lost shadow detail in some areas, and I'd quite like to see the velvety variations that fuller exposure and pulling the tones down later would give.
Could you post the original, either as a variant, if you're able, or as your own Modification to this picture? Also, some information on how you did the B/W concersion would be good - there may be alternative suggestions that we can make for doing the conversion.
And I keep coming back to a gripping view of an iconic structure - with the perfect geometry that I (and a good few people I know) find deeply satisfying. All those vertical cables are, indeed, vertical, and that's painstaking and excellent.
You've been a member for a few weeks, and this is your first upload here. In case you missed it elsewhere, the deal in this Galelry is that you don't get any votes or awards, but you will get feedback. The more focussed your description (and possibly questions), the better we can tailor our comments to your needs.
Here, you've simply said you're trying something different from colour - and I applaud that, as I use B/W a good deal, and even shoot and process monochrome film. It's a good medium, and puts the emphasis on form, shape, texture and light.
What I see is a nicely composed, technically sound picture, which has been quite heavily processed, including a dark vignette and softening at the top. That's a pity - the definition everywhere else is amazing, including the wires above the main suspension cables!
Looking at the histogram, you've completely lost shadow detail in some areas, and I'd quite like to see the velvety variations that fuller exposure and pulling the tones down later would give.
Could you post the original, either as a variant, if you're able, or as your own Modification to this picture? Also, some information on how you did the B/W concersion would be good - there may be alternative suggestions that we can make for doing the conversion.
And I keep coming back to a gripping view of an iconic structure - with the perfect geometry that I (and a good few people I know) find deeply satisfying. All those vertical cables are, indeed, vertical, and that's painstaking and excellent.
Completely with John, above. The basis of a first class image, but very over processed at the top for some reason. I wonder why you went that far because it is very obviously not natural.
A it under exposed too, giving a slightly dark image. Don't think you needed that negative compensation. i'm not convinced mono is best for this - it is quite interesting in a way but the image is a nicely composed pictorial record and record, to me, in this day and age is colour.
As I often say, personal preference.
paul
A it under exposed too, giving a slightly dark image. Don't think you needed that negative compensation. i'm not convinced mono is best for this - it is quite interesting in a way but the image is a nicely composed pictorial record and record, to me, in this day and age is colour.
As I often say, personal preference.
paul
A warm welcome from me too. You have good feedback above. I would just add that a little more space at the top of the frame and less dark vignetting would allow the structure to soar. Here it looks rather cramped, constricted.
You're looking for mood, the spirit of the place. That's something that I appreciate.
Moira
You're looking for mood, the spirit of the place. That's something that I appreciate.
Moira
Thanks guys and girls for your feedback. It is truely appreciated. I was just trying something different as I like good black and white images too.
When I took the photo, in a carpark at the Not SF end of the bridge, the bus driver said, you have 2 minutes to get as many photos as you can. This is one of them. I will upload the colour version for you tomorrow.
Kerro
When I took the photo, in a carpark at the Not SF end of the bridge, the bus driver said, you have 2 minutes to get as many photos as you can. This is one of them. I will upload the colour version for you tomorrow.
Kerro
Guys, I have put the original, as before I black and whited it. Just cropped and sharpened in PS.
When I took the picture, I only had my long lens and of course being so close to the bridge couldn't get the whole thing in.
I have learned since then, that I always take my 28mm - 85mm with me too.
I welcome your feedback.
Kerro
When I took the picture, I only had my long lens and of course being so close to the bridge couldn't get the whole thing in.
I have learned since then, that I always take my 28mm - 85mm with me too.
I welcome your feedback.
Kerro
Thanks for the original.
I've done a much brighter B/W conversion from your colour file, using the Nik Efex full dynamic range filter (Nik's now a free download form Google - I paid around £80 for it 18 months back...)
I wanted to bring out the lovely detail in the hillside on the left, which is largely lost in your much darker conversion (which may also have been done with Nik, or a similar plugin, I realise!)
Dark can be good, but this shot is all about detail (and your technique and gear have given plenty of that), so it seems ot me to be worth celebrating that detail. I can imagine this as an Ansel Adams style picture, shot on slow 10"x8" film, and meticulously processed so that every blade of grass is visible - and your image is not so far short of that level of detail!
Thanks again for both the picture and the conversation. It makes critique feel worthwhile when there's a real dialogue.
I've done a much brighter B/W conversion from your colour file, using the Nik Efex full dynamic range filter (Nik's now a free download form Google - I paid around £80 for it 18 months back...)
I wanted to bring out the lovely detail in the hillside on the left, which is largely lost in your much darker conversion (which may also have been done with Nik, or a similar plugin, I realise!)
Dark can be good, but this shot is all about detail (and your technique and gear have given plenty of that), so it seems ot me to be worth celebrating that detail. I can imagine this as an Ansel Adams style picture, shot on slow 10"x8" film, and meticulously processed so that every blade of grass is visible - and your image is not so far short of that level of detail!
Thanks again for both the picture and the conversation. It makes critique feel worthwhile when there's a real dialogue.
Dudler,
Thanks for the critique on my GGB photos. I like what you did with the colour version.
It is much appreciated and helps to know what I've done wrong so I won't make the same mistake.
I also enjoyed the conversation side with you too. Please keep in touch as I need all the help I can get....
Kerro
Thanks for the critique on my GGB photos. I like what you did with the colour version.
It is much appreciated and helps to know what I've done wrong so I won't make the same mistake.
I also enjoyed the conversation side with you too. Please keep in touch as I need all the help I can get....
Kerro
It's not about right and wrong, so much as giving you options, and suggesting interpretations. There are circumstances when a dark, moody and heavily vignetted version will be absolutely right.
I've enjoyed the conversation, too - and I'll be keeping in touch as you post more pictures!
I've enjoyed the conversation, too - and I'll be keeping in touch as you post more pictures!
