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By kimi012
I like this photograph beause of the posture of the little boy who's running, however I am not sure if this picture is complete in itsef or not. I want to know if this picture needs something more and I would highly appreciate your comments and suggestions on this one.

Tags: Fun Park Action General Play Black and white Flowers and plants Boy running Portraits and people Humour and fun Sports and action

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mrswoolybill Plus
14 3.0k 2462 United Kingdom
8 Jan 2016 8:50AM
I had a feeling that we would see some interesting work from you! This one again goes to the heart of what photography can do better than any other medium - capture the fleeting moment.

I'm enjoying it without any background information apart from the Exif data - but for critique purposes (and curiosity) I would like to know if this was a grab shot or to some extent it was planned? I suspect the latter because the camera settings settings are so appropriate. If it was a grab shot, then it was a mix of good technique and good luck! For starters, that wall is perfectly set on the upper third...

Looking at those settings my first thought was 'You could have used a larger aperture and lower ISO'. But then that foliage bottom right would be soft. And I think it's actually quite important, it's a link between us and the child.

This is an image about stillness and movement, life passing through the formal lines. The essential setting is the shutter speed, fast enough to avoid camera shake and to freeze the child's movement perfectly in mid stride.

You were at maximum focal length, you couldn't zoom in any closer, and in a way that's good because it now leaves you free to crop creatively. And that I think is the way forward.

The composition has three simple, strong elements. The foliage bottom right that I have already mentioned, the child of course, and the horizontal line of wall and trees at the top. Well done for having that perfectly level, that is so important here.

The weakness of the composition I think is that the child is central. That can give a static feel. Conventionally we would expect to see him running into the frame, and running from left to right because that is how we expect movement to progress. But why not tease people's expectations... I enjoy compositions that break the rules, that have subjects looking or moving out of the side of the frame. That sort of image has ambiguity, it asks questions. It's the reason why your Separate ways upload works.

There are lots of possibilities for cropping this to simplify and strengthen this, I want to keep your landscape proportions but crop tighter to have the boy heading for the edge of the frame.

Modification to follow soon.
Moira
kimi012 6 1 India
8 Jan 2016 9:38AM
Thank you Moira! That was really helpfu and to answer your question, I took this shot from the balcony and it was totally not planned. I saw some kids playing in the park and this boy came in and I took the shot. The settings were to capture the motion of the kids but then it worked well for this shot also.
The 'child in the center' suggestion is particularly good because I too realised that I could have played with the positioning of the child in the frame.
Thanks again. Smile

Kimi
mrswoolybill Plus
14 3.0k 2462 United Kingdom
8 Jan 2016 9:40AM
Thanks for the feedback, and for answering my question. With your view from the balcony you had the opportunity to plan your settings, and you used it very well.

Why not try some crops of your own, and upload them as modifications?
Moira
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1879 England
8 Jan 2016 10:25AM
I am tempted not to post a mod for now - I've done one that is different from hers, but let's see yours first!

Moira's said it all, very completely, and i can't add anything of value. Until I post my alternative crop...
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4272 Canada
8 Jan 2016 1:47PM
The height enhances the dynamic quality of the shot, as it gives the sense the runner is moving faster than he/she is.

The shadow cast by the subject I think is also important, so its a little more pronounced in the mod.

I have tried something different as an alternate crop, which combines cropping to place more room in front, and a rotation to change direction from left to right.

The direction change can have an impact on many viewers, though you know its wrong, others wont, and a left to right motion may "read" better, running to the future rather than the past in a way.


Regards


Willie
kimi012 6 1 India
8 Jan 2016 4:10PM

Quote:The height enhances the dynamic quality of the shot, as it gives the sense the runner is moving faster than he/she is.

The shadow cast by the subject I think is also important, so its a little more pronounced in the mod.

I have tried something different as an alternate crop, which combines cropping to place more room in front, and a rotation to change direction from left to right.

The direction change can have an impact on many viewers, though you know its wrong, others wont, and a left to right motion may "read" better, running to the future rather than the past in a way.


Regards


Willie




Hi Willie, I liked that you have rotated the picture and that there's room left in the front. Thanks for the insight. Smile

Kimi.
paulbroad 14 131 1293 United Kingdom
10 Jan 2016 6:06PM
There isthe basis of a fine image here but it woul need a hugecrop. There is a lot of burnt out area to the bottom and distracting patterns at the top.The great part is the child, the shadow and a small space around with more space in front than behind. As little as a quarter of the frame.

Paul
kimi012 6 1 India
11 Jan 2016 10:50AM
I agree Paul that this picture needs a huge crop and I wasn't too sure of the picture of the picture before but now I know what all elements needed to be taken of care at the time of shooting. Thank you for pointig those out. Smile

Kimi

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