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Model on the runway

By kimi012
I saw this lady strutting down the road and she looked like a model to me so I decided to take the shot. I would really like to know your take on this photograph and the composition. What works and what does not.
Thanks!

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mrswoolybill Plus
14 3.0k 2459 United Kingdom
13 Jan 2016 9:03AM
I like this a lot, I like the way you catch the surrealism of the frozen moment.

Can I suggest that there's a bit too much clutter in the frame, that the result is a bit confused and confusing. I can see several possible crops but the most appealing reduces the frame to the lady and the two white arrows.

Modification to follow.
Moira
RobboB Plus
14 133 United Kingdom
13 Jan 2016 10:21AM
A agree with Moira. A crop would take this to a new level in my opinion
Richsr 14 91 223 England
13 Jan 2016 10:44AM
Certainly a crop to take away some of the surround street furniture would be a good start especially on the RHS as we look at it. You do need to keep the top road arrow.
R.
kimi012 6 1 India
13 Jan 2016 3:29PM

Quote:I like this a lot, I like the way you catch the surrealism of the frozen moment.

Can I suggest that there's a bit too much clutter in the frame, that the result is a bit confused and confusing. I can see several possible crops but the most appealing reduces the frame to the lady and the two white arrows.

Modification to follow.
Moira



Thank you Moira and the modification looks cleaner Smile

Kimi.
kimi012 6 1 India
13 Jan 2016 3:30PM

Quote:Certainly a crop to take away some of the surround street furniture would be a good start especially on the RHS as we look at it. You do need to keep the top road arrow.
R.



Thanks R. I agree with you about the top arrow Smile

Kimi.
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1879 England
13 Jan 2016 6:56PM
This is decently sharp, but the EXIF data makes me twitch!

I'd double the ISO, at least, and raise the shutter speed.

Really well seen. There are not only many crops possible of this frame, but a wealth of different shots as the girl moved across the road. The thing is, most of us would have missed them all...
dark_lord Plus
17 2.8k 784 England
13 Jan 2016 7:43PM
Strong lines and shapes are what make for good graphic images. They also tend to be effective with a cleaner look, like Moira's crop. Which means shooting a vertical or portrait format would have been the way to go.
But, you had to get the moment which was fleeting, no time to shoot something different.

When you see the picture coming together in front of you, and you start to raise the camera you'll automatically decide on the best orientation so that when the camera is at your eye it'll be ready. That only comes with practice and evaluating your results.

However, you have the hardest and most important aspect seemingly sorted and that's to see the opportunity in the first place.
pamelajean Plus
15 1.6k 2238 United Kingdom
13 Jan 2016 8:00PM
You have some good low light here, Kimi, giving you very long shadows, and I particularly like the girl's shadow, looking as if it's walking ahead of her.....can she keep up with itSmile?
Yes, she does have the look of a model.

There are some interesting elements to the image, but it needs simplifying. The shadows and the arrows are the ones to keep. I like the fact that the arrows point a different way to the way she is walking.

In my modification I have obviously cropped your image, eliminating a lot of street furniture, etc. I decided to leave in the post on the right, and went for a square format. This places your model on a thirds line. I cloned out a few stray pieces of shadow that were still in my frame on the left side.
Because I was tempted to remove the splodges of white on the road, I had to give it a go to see what it looked like. I think it helps the viewer to concentrate on the important stronger elements.

Pamela.
kimi012 6 1 India
14 Jan 2016 6:10AM

Quote:This is decently sharp, but the EXIF data makes me twitch!

I'd double the ISO, at least, and raise the shutter speed.

Really well seen. There are not only many crops possible of this frame, but a wealth of different shots as the girl moved across the road. The thing is, most of us would have missed them all...



Thank you! I'll keep that in mind Smile
kimi012 6 1 India
14 Jan 2016 6:18AM

Quote:Strong lines and shapes are what make for good graphic images. They also tend to be effective with a cleaner look, like Moira's crop. Which means shooting a vertical or portrait format would have been the way to go.
But, you had to get the moment which was fleeting, no time to shoot something different.

When you see the picture coming together in front of you, and you start to raise the camera you'll automatically decide on the best orientation so that when the camera is at your eye it'll be ready. That only comes with practice and evaluating your results.

However, you have the hardest and most important aspect seemingly sorted and that's to see the opportunity in the first place.



Thank you for the insight! It was really helpful and a vertical orientation would have been better indeed. Smile
kimi012 6 1 India
14 Jan 2016 6:24AM

Quote:You have some good low light here, Kimi, giving you very long shadows, and I particularly like the girl's shadow, looking as if it's walking ahead of her.....can she keep up with itSmile?
Yes, she does have the look of a model.

There are some interesting elements to the image, but it needs simplifying. The shadows and the arrows are the ones to keep. I like the fact that the arrows point a different way to the way she is walking.

In my modification I have obviously cropped your image, eliminating a lot of street furniture, etc. I decided to leave in the post on the right, and went for a square format. This places your model on a thirds line. I cloned out a few stray pieces of shadow that were still in my frame on the left side.
Because I was tempted to remove the splodges of white on the road, I had to give it a go to see what it looked like. I think it helps the viewer to concentrate on the important stronger elements.

Pamela.



Thank you Pamela, your mods and observation helped a lot in getting a cleaner version of this picture. I really appreciate that. Smile

Kimi.
kimi012 6 1 India
14 Jan 2016 6:34AM
I was a little confused of what to include and what not while I was shooting this frame . I wanted the strong arrows on the road but then the poles and other street furniture was a little too distracting. Then this model walked in and after clicking the picture, it turned out to be too cluttered up.

Thank you so much to all of you who for helping me get a clearer perspective while shooting such frames. That was what I needed to know and I know now what to include and what not, the next time I shoot such a frame that has too many lines.

Kimi.
paulbroad 14 131 1293 United Kingdom
14 Jan 2016 8:31AM
Basis of a very fine image but, as John says, you really need to look at exposure details. ISO400 and a subsequently faster shutter speed would be far better but you are reasonably sharp as it is. There is just too much clutter, figure, road and arrow is all that is needed. My eye just travels all over the place.

Paul
kimi012 6 1 India
15 Jan 2016 12:52PM

Quote:Basis of a very fine image but, as John says, you really need to look at exposure details. ISO400 and a subsequently faster shutter speed would be far better but you are reasonably sharp as it is. There is just too much clutter, figure, road and arrow is all that is needed. My eye just travels all over the place.

Paul



Agreed. Thanks Paul! Smile

Kimi.

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