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stair railing of my childhood

By Lakkou  
When I was a child this view of the window from the stair railing was the announcement of a new day.

It was a sun shining day and the window is brighting a lot, what make taking these wood lines in the window shutter difficult in the other hand I would to get all element sharp.

Tags: Window Black and white stair railing

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mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.0k 2465 United Kingdom
27 Oct 2017 7:05PM
Photography is partly about saving memories. It's amazing to think that out of thousands of years of human civilization, it's only the last few generations that have been able to do this...

I love the idea. There's a member here who only uploads very occasionally, but he does this sort of image very well. Tantalising glimpses of corners of old rooms, locked in the memory. See here. It's interesting how many times net curtains appear in his images.

Looking at this, I wanted to do three things. To get the verticals correct. To lighten slightly. And to reduce the number of random items included. I opted to get rid of the section to the left, so that the banister could serve as a frame. This is about a private place, so enclose it. And then the staircase, leading off to the right, is the route to imagine exploring.

The corner of the picture on the wall is the only personal possession that I have left in the frame. I like the bare walls, you can hang your own ideas on them.

Thanks for making me think, a lot harder than I've needed to for a while.
Moira
pamelajean Plus
15 1.6k 2238 United Kingdom
27 Oct 2017 7:12PM
From what you say, Akram, this scene holds many memories for you.
As the image stands, it will continue to evoke those memories.

However, to make this image into something with more impact, you need to look for those parts of the scene which are strong and engaging, so that others may consider it to be interesting, too.

Considering the strong contrasts, you did well. The window isn't too bright, and the pattern of the net curtain is well defined.
The light coming in through the window has highlighted the shapes of the edges of the railings, which is a nice feature, but that light, being behind the railings, has also rendered them very dark, like silhouettes. There's nothing wrong with that, and I think it's a strong element, especially with the diagonal of the stairs.
I wonder if there is a viewpoint where you can avoid the very large banister rails, leaving just the diagonal of the stairs, because the large ones are very dominant.

I don't fully understand what you have said in your Description Box, but I wonder if you like the railings being in silhouette. If not, you should use positive Exposure Compensation instead of the -1/3 you chose. This would have given you some detail in the wood. Personally, I like it the way it is here.

I have done a modification where I cropped drastically in order to simply fill the frame with the parts that I think are interesting. I used Perspective Correction to get the lines straight, removed the part picture frame on the right, and made some slight contrast adjustments.

Pamela.

PS: Moira and I were typing at the same time.
banehawi Plus
17 2.6k 4274 Canada
27 Oct 2017 10:28PM
This is gorgeous, a great idea.

This also reminds me of childhood memories at my Grandmothers house; I would add in to the memory some smells, like polish, and food.

Its a bit crooked and twisted, - but who can say that even matters, or if you remembered it like this!

So, some minor corrections re geometry, and Ive mixed in my own memory in the mods, A shared human consciousnesses in a strange way! I used a lot of negative compensation to get silhouettes, and show the delicate patterns of the lace curtains.


I hope you like them



Regards



Willie
Lakkou 4 Tunisia
27 Oct 2017 11:15PM
Thank you Moira,

It's the first time I shoot a photo in black and white which is not dark. Your modification showed me that I have to focus on the element I like to put in evidence and make it simple.

I will try tomorrow to make another shot as per your mod and try to get more space above the window.

Akram
Lakkou 4 Tunisia
27 Oct 2017 11:33PM
Thank you Pamela,

As Moira your mod showed me that I have to avoid including much elements in the photo. Actually the use of a positive exposure made the window very bright, I'm sorry I didn't explain it well in my description ( my English is not very good), I uploaded a positive exposure as mod5.

Thank you again I like your mod.

Akram
Lakkou 4 Tunisia
27 Oct 2017 11:34PM

Quote:Thank you Moira,

It's the first time I shoot a photo in black and white which is not dark. Your modification showed me that I have to focus on the element I like to put in evidence and make it simple.

I will try tomorrow to make another shot as per your mod and try to get more space above the window.

Akram

PS : Anton has really nice photo, I'm going to look deeply tomorrow ( to get inspiration)

Lakkou 4 Tunisia
28 Oct 2017 12:06AM
Thank you Willie,

I'm very happy that the photo touched you, when I worked in an international level I noticed that human are sharing a lot of undisclosed thinking,traditions ans memories.

I like your mod and how you managed to show the patterns of lace curtains.

I'll take other shoots tomorrow in different time (different lightning from outside) to show the different patterns in the photo.

Akram
ericfaragh Plus
18 149 6 United Kingdom
28 Oct 2017 7:37AM
This image caught my eye and made me click for a closer look, which says much for its graphic appeal and composition. If an image looks good as a thumbnail, then it's likely to be well composed. Your dof, considering the limitations imposed by the light from the window, is excellent and has resulted in a good exposure, with the bw choice adding to the graphic impact. Congratulations on successfully creating an image which achieves your intentions beautifully.
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1884 England
28 Oct 2017 8:38AM
A lot of good thoughs above. The geometry is hard to get right in camera, but easy to correct in processing.

Good technical choices - the small aperture for good depth of field matters.

I think this would do well i nthe main gallery - it touches memories for me, too, not because the staircase is particularly like any I knew as a child, but because it reminds me of stairs that are deep in my memory, and hold the same sort of significance for me as this does for you...

Excelletn work.
Lakkou 4 Tunisia
28 Oct 2017 12:55PM
Thank you very much Eric for your words
Lakkou 4 Tunisia
28 Oct 2017 12:57PM
Thank you John, I'm really happy that I'm able to transfer my emotion through a photo
paulbroad 14 131 1293 United Kingdom
28 Oct 2017 4:31PM
A strong image because it is stark and simple. The story? Not sure I see that but it will be relevant to the author and that is what matters. To the third party viewer, it becomes subjective.

What would i do with it? Don,t know. Not one for the wall and not library material but strong on an exhibition wall as an attention grabber.

Paul
Lakkou 4 Tunisia
28 Oct 2017 5:08PM
Thank you Paul for your comment
dark_lord Plus
17 2.9k 786 England
29 Oct 2017 9:38PM
A bit late to this one I'm afraid but I'm leaving a comment as it's something I can relate to also, the net curtains in my grandmother's house too.

The overall message is to keep things simple. While the mods show that, and create a strong image, I do like the inclusion of the pictures on the wall here.
In fact, there are likely to be a number of different compositions taking in more of the scene, and less.
Lakkou 4 Tunisia
30 Oct 2017 9:46PM
Thank you Keith, your comments are never late,
I have to go back in my parent's house and try shooting from different angles and see what is possible

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