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By leftie
this is a photo of me standing on a jetty trying to stay still for two minutes, trying to portray somebody deep in thought.

Tags: Black and white Long exposure

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chase Plus
14 1.5k 329 England
4 Oct 2019 7:41AM
I think you have achieved you goal, my very first thought was that the figure was going to jump into the water !!
Well set up and timed, nice reflection, which fits with the objective.... reflective thoughts.
If I were to do anything to this it would be a bit of a crop from the bottom, I will try a mod and see how it looks.

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chase Plus
14 1.5k 329 England
4 Oct 2019 7:46AM
So, I did a very quick mod, a crop from the bottom but not as much as to interfere with the reflection as I think this is an important part of the image. I did crop from the top too and put the horizon right onto the upper third of the frame.
I didn't want to crop any further as I believe he (you) needs all the space around him in order to convey the message of ' deep in thought '

Converted to sRGB colour space which is the best one for displaying on the site.
mrswoolybill Plus
13 1.9k 2172 United Kingdom
4 Oct 2019 9:42AM
It's a beautiful idea, and the simplicity of the figure is eloquent. There are hints of Gormley's Another Place in this.

The problem for me is that I'm not sure whether this is about the distance between us and you, or the distance between you and the horizon. Putting the horizon on the upper third suggests the former, and yet your stance suggests the latter...

It works better for me in Janet's crop, because the long exposure has removed all sense of substance from the water leaving a sort of void in the foreground. That effectively tells the viewer 'Keep out, don't explore the frame'. Cropping there allows the reflection to act as a bridge, a connection.

I have tried a radically different crop. Image quality has suffered a lot in cropping, but I'm adding it purely as an alternative interpretation.

Thanks for giving me something to think about.
Moira
dark_lord Plus
16 2.5k 639 England
4 Oct 2019 11:50AM
I thik you've achieved your goal too.
It can also say isolation or loneliness. I'm sure others can think of other feelings. So it can work on a number of levels.

It works for me as is, though I like Janet's panoramic crop. Alternatives that are different, some will prefer one or the other I guess.

The simplicity means mono is a strong choice too. Slight blue or copper tonng would push the viewer to one mood or another, but again a different approach, not better or worse.
It would get votes in the main Gallery.

Keith
pamelajean Plus
14 1.3k 2117 United Kingdom
4 Oct 2019 8:58PM
I like the simplicity of this, Norman, and admire your "selfie" idea, which has worked extremely well.
Your horizon is nice and straight, and the image is well suited to black and white.

In my modification I have cropped to place the horizon on the top thirds line, and to place your figure on a thirds intersection, which is the power point, the place where the viewer's eye should fall first.
I slightly sharpened the jetty and softened the sky, where there is a lot of grain.

Just a suggestion. We all see things differently.

Pamela.
dudler Plus
16 1.1k 1606 England
4 Oct 2019 9:04PM
Hi, Norman -

Given your track record on the site, I'm amazed that you've posted inthe Critique Gallery... Was there a reason, or was it a slip of the cursor?

Like Keith, I think Janet's crop nails it to perfection.
paulbroad 12 131 1288 United Kingdom
5 Oct 2019 6:23PM
Very nice indeed. My kind of strong simple image with loads of impact.

A racker as is.

Paul
leftie 3 11 United Kingdom
7 Oct 2019 9:10PM
Thanks for all your comments. How do i get to see the image that you have worked on?
dudler Plus
16 1.1k 1606 England
9 Oct 2019 9:27AM
On the left side below the frame there's a blue box marked 'Modifications' - click on that, and then on the numbers that come up beside it.

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