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Lingerie

By LeighRebecca  
Did a shoot in a disused hangar for a student's final fashion show. She has designed and produced a lovely range of 40's style lingerie. I'm posting here in the hope of some critique because I run out of ideas for processing portraits, and I'd welcome some feedback before I offer her the processed images.

Tags: Digitally manipulated Portraits and people

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This photo is here for critique. Please only comment constructively and with suggestions on how to improve it.

Comments


9 May 2011 2:42PM
To be honest I love the photo set up and everything but just feel that the shoes are wrong for the era you are creating.

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would not really know how 2 do it better, but (just in my humble opinionWink the backdrop could hv some more ???? structure ? or slightly different shade ...? or is it the proportion that "bugs" me ...

anyway, nice composition & v nice girl Smile brgds - Michael
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
9 May 2011 2:49PM
Thanks 'rationassassin' - the clothes, shoes and props were decided by the student - I could only really decide on placement, poses, lighting and processing, but thanks for the feedback.
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
9 May 2011 2:52PM
'Monkeytravels, - thanks. I put a layer over the image, particularly the background, so maybe it's made it flatten visually, and looks a bit wrong - good point, I thought something like that when I was doing it, but carried on. Cheers.
Sibb 4 United Kingdom
9 May 2011 3:12PM
I love this
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
9 May 2011 3:26PM
Thanks Sibb Grin
arhb Plus
8 2.8k 68 United Kingdom
9 May 2011 4:21PM
Great image LeighRebecca - I like the way she's looking out of frame - she's well posed and lit.
A great location and well composed.
I do find the window light distracting, and have lessened the brightness in my mod.
I have also de-saturated and treaked the skin tones slightly, although that's possibly just my own taste.
The only other critique is the vertical strip of light going into her shoulder, which I have cloned out in mod.
9 May 2011 4:33PM
Looks good to me, Leigh, except have to agree with 'arhb' about the vertical strip of light coming out of her shoulder, but in particular, the bright area from the window to the right, which attracts the eye away. I do prefer, though, the colours of your original version to the mod Smile
Trev Smile
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
9 May 2011 4:37PM
Thanks Andrew. I like all your changes. I wasn't sure about the light running down to her shoulder, but I think you're right that it's best cloned out. I would choose to desaturate myself, except that the images are intended to show off a student's lingerie work, so I refrained from desaturating to leave the colour of the clothing, but I do like the effect. Thanks for the mod and feedback.
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
9 May 2011 4:39PM
Thanks Trev for your feedback. I guess the window needs to be toned down Smile
dathersmith 8 550 12 England
9 May 2011 7:29PM
Hi Leigh, a fine portrait of a lovely model but I agree with Andrew regarding the strip of light and brightness of the window.

Darren.
Eviscera Plus
9 1.1k 149 United Kingdom
9 May 2011 7:47PM
tbh , the suitcase is a distraction as well.

Its competing for the theme.

Slapped a mod to give an idea !
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
9 May 2011 8:03PM
Thanks Darren.
Eviscera, I'm honoured that you thought it worth doing a mod. You are no doubt correct, but we had quite a few props, and got carried away. I think there are 6 cases in the shot I've just worked on Tongue Must bear that in mind - less is more. Quite right. Thanks for the input.
Eviscera Plus
9 1.1k 149 United Kingdom
9 May 2011 9:18PM
oh Leigh , I have no pedestal or ego. Willies the modgod

Hes one of the sites greatest assets.

I was just thinking how it could be less cluttered to show off your lovely photography !
Goggz 8 2.3k 72 Wales
9 May 2011 9:31PM
I don't know if it is of any real concern but the horizon is a tad out too.

Anyway, I like what you've done, but agree about the light strip, windows and suitcase.
Good luck!
Cheers, Goggz
Jestertheclown Plus
7 7.2k 249 England
9 May 2011 9:45PM
I reckon you should lose the suitcase, the strips of light and tone down the window . . .
. . . just like Eviscera's mod. but carried out less quickly.

The purists will then tell you that although she's on a third, she's facing the wrong way.
Which doesn't bother me one iota. I think it works well.
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
10 May 2011 3:50PM
Thanks fellas, I'll take it all on board for processing the others, and thanks for the HC Pete, that was very welcome Smile
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
10 May 2011 4:06PM
Thanks for the mod, Steve, very clever stuff with the chair leg, and I really like the overall effect. Smile
JamesGarfield 7 915 4 United Kingdom
10 May 2011 7:54PM
I don't find the lights a problem to be honest, I think her right hand hanging over the arm of the chair really lets the shot down. It appears so big because of its angle and also because it's fully lit. There's no way I can really mod it.
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
10 May 2011 9:05PM
Thanks James, no doubt it would look a little better if it weren't so face on, but I can't say it spoils the shot for me, even after you've pointed it out.
NEWMANP Plus
8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
10 May 2011 11:17PM
i love the limited range of tones, the composition is excellent and the setting pretty good but those strips of light on the rear wall, although necessary to complete the context, are badly placed to the left of the face.

if it were mine, id seriously consider losing the strip near the face and a couple of those high bay light fittings.

although the lighting on the beautiful model is well handled, i wonder if it could be just a little overlit in a sort of theatrical way for the setting and a suggestion of some shadows here and there may have added to the impact. possibly casting shadows over the model too as if lit by north lights in the roof or something. the lighting is a little bright too

has a lot to like though, the overall composition is lovely, i think the shoes are pretty much correct for the era too, platforms i believe were out in the thirties, but oh my god didnt they come back in the seventies, i think there are quite a few pairs on my own wedding pictures Grin

nice to see you running off in different directions to the landscapes that you used to do so well,

Phil
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
11 May 2011 11:08AM
Thanks for that Phil. Maybe the model is a little bright - a cross-processing layer brightened her up a bit, probably too much. I think I need to print a few and see how they look in print. (still doing landscapes, btw, I just don't have time to come on epz)
11 May 2011 10:15PM
I prefer your shot to the others,it all comes down to personel taste and what i have read of the other posts, it is just miniscule points which some like,and some do not,carry on the good work and give her the prints.
11 May 2011 10:18PM
I also think as the model is the centre piece of the photo it is perfectly lit for the scenario.
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
12 May 2011 1:05PM
Thanks Illuvator.
franfoto 8 2 32 England
19 May 2011 7:59PM
Great 40's feel, I like the processing, the props and the setting and as I have said before, the hairstyle is class too.

Fran
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
19 May 2011 8:23PM
Thanks Fran
Enmark 6 5 5 United Kingdom
23 May 2011 8:21PM
I stumbled across this and its very pleasing image, nicely done .
LeighRebecca 8 267 10 England
24 May 2011 4:56PM
Thank you Enmark. Just peeped at your pf and it's stunning.

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