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Solitary

By LisaDelp    
a scene from Dalgety Bay, Scotland

Tags: Tree Silhouette Black and white Black and white

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Comments


Georden 5 11 England
23 Jul 2011 10:18PM
Great image. Might have been better with th ewhole tree, but I guess you got all you could!
Very nice,

George

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23 Jul 2011 10:23PM
Thank you, yes you are right, having the tree top in there would have made for a better picture. Thanks for the input!
sawsengee Plus
10 5 11 Malaysia
24 Jul 2011 7:29AM
Just some honest, friendly opinion:
1. the composition is too tight....maybe zooming out would bring a little more balance to the picture by adding more foreground for composition stability and the possible inclusion of the whole tree;
2. the sky & water horizon look burnt out, probably you wanted a more graphic high contrast image, but a lower EV could add more grey shade gradation for the sky & water.
Best wishes.
24 Jul 2011 4:37PM
Hi, Thank you. Good feedback to learn from! Lisa
pamelajean Plus
10 969 1847 United Kingdom
24 Jul 2011 7:10PM
Hello, Lisa. I liike the strength of the blacks and whites, with the bench and tree silhouetted against the background. I feel that the trunk of the tree would be better nearer to the right side of the frame, to act as a sort of framing for the man on the bench. In order to include the bench and the tree, there wasn't much you could do about the composition, but it would be better if the man were not looking towards the outside of the frame, but in towards the scene. I have therefore used free licence in my modification, and have mirrored the man on the bench. I then cropped, and adjusted levels a little. This tighter composition gives you two thirds sky and one third water on the vertical.
Pamela.
24 Jul 2011 7:30PM
Hi Pamela,
Mirroring, cropping and adjustments, much better. I like it alot! Thank you, Pamela. I learn by reading of critiques, but much more by seeing a visual example. Thanks for taking the time. Lisa
paulbroad 9 117 1079 United Kingdom
24 Jul 2011 7:32PM
Potentially superb. Pamela's mod is a great improvement and mono works here, but, for me, you need much LESS tree and more at the bottom. I would crop the top and add a bit at the bottom. Then you have a cracking salon grade image - with the density as Pamela's mod.

Paul
24 Jul 2011 7:42PM
Hi Paul, thank you! I'm learning alot from all your inputs on how to compose a photo. Lisa
MalcolmM Plus
11 590 5 Scotland
24 Jul 2011 7:54PM
Have a look at 'Darkphotographer' 's image ( first on his page ). Sorry can't do the link. It is so well composed & taken - yours reminded me immediately of it.....
Great potential in the shot.
Malcolm
24 Jul 2011 8:15PM
Hi Malcom, Thank you! I'll give Darkphotographer a look. It's great to learn by example. Lisa
24 Jul 2011 11:55PM
Hi Malcom, I checked out the Darkphotographers shot. We have definately crossed paths. Very fun to view his scene and how he set himself up in the shot. You are right, very well composed, I like it in the 5x5 format. Lisa

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