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fazzer Plus
7 54 7 United Kingdom
24 Feb 2014 7:38PM
works better with there being something on top of the case, would be great to be able to see some more of the typed letters on the page
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dudler Plus
13 468 910 England
24 Feb 2014 7:49PM
Definitely a stronger image - though I miss the bleachy processing...
derekhansen Plus
8 210 24 United Kingdom
24 Feb 2014 9:53PM
Working much better Nick. I wonder if moving the case and the typewriter closer together would give even more cohesion.
Looking forward to seeing the finished version.
Derek
Nick_w Plus
9 4.3k 99 England
24 Feb 2014 10:11PM
Funny you should say that Derek, I tried that, or should I say I abandoned it. The table isn't quite as big as it looks, the bag and typewriter (which is on loan!) are overhanging as it is. I'm on the look out for a larger table - or board to do these on.

I have another idea a lot different and simpler (well at least in terms of composition) which will probably be the next one I do, before coming back to the series proper.
Eviscera 10 1.1k 149 United Kingdom
24 Feb 2014 11:19PM
Its a beauty Nick,

Well "formed" , nothing to intrusive and using tonality (red) to draw the viewers attention to a well placed focal point and a much better lower pov.

What you include/exclude is subjective so i aint sayin nowt (apart from that you need to drop the glasses cos they are round and imbalance the linearity of the rest of the scene and , some some smoke above the book would have added continuity and erm , stuff)

It moulds well.

Good work in progress , just maybe refine the edges of the pipe (as in your last upload) some haloing going on suppresses its blend.

Had a beer lol

Smile
Nick_w Plus
9 4.3k 99 England
24 Feb 2014 11:48PM
That's great comments Dave. I'm not too worried about the halo, just over sharpened the web version, or more correctly, I don't bother with 1000px these days, use my standard 1400px file - bit of compression issues, can't be ar**d these days sizing for each site and salons. Just checked the print and it's spot on.

The glasses, not sure, there's the bowl of the pipe, coins, and lens of the camera all circular - but it does pretrude the comp. Tho there is a better composition with these elements (got the base image), may upload that before the final one. A while back I said stills weren't my way forward, well I'm warming to them Wink it really makes you think about composition tho granted compared to a good landscape they don't do too well on here (tho elsewhere, I'm finding they do much better).

My next mini project before I come back to this will combine a bit of surrealism with a still life... If I can get the visualisation right that is (and I want to do it as much in camera as possible). That is where I really want to take the still life's - a bit different from the norm.
TrevBatWCC Plus
8 12 10 England
25 Feb 2014 2:51PM
Excellent work, Nick, and think works best of the two versions Smile
Trev Smile
User_Removed 3 10 4 United Kingdom
26 Feb 2014 7:45AM
The smoking pipe adds an extra touch.
Di
Nick_w Plus
9 4.3k 99 England
22 Mar 2014 10:08PM
Cheers everyone. I'm always surprised with still life's as on here they do just OK, but on other popular sites they are by far and away my most popular images (you know the ones, one starts with a 1 the other with a 5 and both end with an x).

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