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Sketeboard lad

By Nigwel
Taken on the banks of the River Thames one day in 2013.

The lad looked like he`d had enough..

Tags: Portraits and people

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Coast 8 1.6k 292 United Kingdom
19 Apr 2014 8:36AM
Morning Nigel

The expression, shoe off, holding his ankle all leads to conclude he has had enough. The abandoned and "crashed" skateboard giving the context to what looks like someone who has had an accident.

Quite an interesting processing as the soft focus effect with clear centre spot blurs the detail. For me it creates that feeling of nauseous pain for the subject. For anyone who has come off a skateboard, a bike, or just banged part of the body hard and has that feeling where everything around you goes a little blurred whilst your brain appears to focus in on the pain, will probably understand.

Overall an interesting image.

From a technical point of view I find the shaft of light cutting in the top third on the right side, is a little distracting. It was there, and in camera you could not have avoided it other than to come round to the right of your subject and shoot in at a different angle. That would of course changed the picture potentially, and perhaps brings other things into the back drop that could equally be as distracting.

In processing you could clone and/or darken this area. This would help retain the viewers eye onto the subject and the story it tells.

I hope that helps.

Regards
Paul

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cats_123 Plus
12 4.5k 26 Northern Ireland
19 Apr 2014 8:48AM
The title could be `Pain' or `Exhaustion' SmileSmile
mrswoolybill Plus
9 877 1429 United Kingdom
19 Apr 2014 8:58AM
I know the place, it provides some excellent action shots but this is different. Full marks for seeing the story.

Composition-wise you have placed his torso centrally, with the abandoned skate on the left balancing his left leg and foot on the right. I think I would have tried moving a little to the right, to compress the width of the main subject area and also to reduce the impact of that light strip top right. But maybe that wouldn't have worked. Even from this viewpoint you could have allowed a little less space on the left, more on the right. I suspect that he wasn't going to move away in a hurry so it's worth taking time to compose. Did you try any other shots?

The added blurring doesn't work for me. In a sense you are trying to create a Lensbaby effect, with a little oasis of sharp calm surrounded by the blur of the world's chaos - but that effect works because Lensbaby blur is radial and dynamic. This is just haze. In particular I want the eyes and the hands to be sharp, and they are not.
Moira

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