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Internet danger!

By Nikon442  
A photoshopped image just trying to illustrate the dangers of the world wide web!

Tags: Photoshop Computer Daughter Portraits and people

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paulbroad Plus
12 131 1285 United Kingdom
16 Sep 2017 5:16PM
Effective and well constructed. Not really much else to say. You know what you are doing. There are a few minor indications of work such as a slight light line round the girl, but well done.

Paul

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Niknut Plus
9 2.3k 78 United Kingdom
16 Sep 2017 5:37PM
GrinGrinGrinGrin !....great shot !...very effective piece of work, with lovely
light & vibrant colours !.
Jestertheclown 11 8.0k 252 England
16 Sep 2017 7:18PM
As Paul has said, a well thought out and completed image.
There's a colour cast to it, which is easily removed in software but what really lets it down is the curtain hook in the background.
Also, there's a small triangular "hole" in the curtain which, I imagine, shouldn't be there.
Hope this helps.
Bren.
Nikon442 2 21 1
16 Sep 2017 7:40PM

Quote:Effective and well constructed. Not really much else to say. You know what you are doing. There are a few minor indications of work such as a slight light line round the girl, but well done.

Paul



Thanks Paul. The halo is a result of pushing the shadow/highlights a tad too far.
Nikon442 2 21 1
16 Sep 2017 7:47PM

Quote:GrinGrinGrinGrin !....great shot !...very effective piece of work, with lovely
light & vibrant colours !.



Thank you, all comments are much appreciated.
Nikon442 2 21 1
16 Sep 2017 7:51PM

Quote:As Paul has said, a well thought out and completed image.
There's a colour cast to it, which is easily removed in software but what really lets it down is the curtain hook in the background.
Also, there's a small triangular "hole" in the curtain which, I imagine, shouldn't be there.
Hope this helps.
Bren.



I agree about the curtain hook, in hindsight I should have covered it. Thanks for the feedback.
pamelajean Plus
13 1.2k 2094 United Kingdom
16 Sep 2017 10:04PM
This is good, Garry, but could be better with a few changes.
The idea is sound and the image has impact.

The curtain tie-back has been mentioned. It was one of the first things I noticed, which is a shame because the hand should have been the first thing. That tie-back is too close to the girl, right in front of her face, as if emanating from her open mouth. It's bright against the dark curtain, and has a lovely curl that captures the attention.
The light triangle on the curtain looks as if it should be clicked on to start a videoSmile.

Your "story" or message is strong, and unwanted elements that have nothing to do with that message should be avoided.

Not so important, but worth considering, is the dark desk lamp behind the hand. It competes with the outline of the sleeve and hand.

I'd like to have seen the rest of the girl's arm. As it is, her hand is resting on the bottom frame edge. I think it's important to see the arm because it's one of the necessary elements in your message, i.e. using the computer.

You must have spent some time setting this up, so I would suggest having a less intrusive background, and nothing strongly coloured like the curtain.

Pamela.
Nikon442 2 21 1
17 Sep 2017 10:25AM

Quote:


You must have spent some time setting this up

Pamela.



Thanks for the feedback and I take on board all suggestions, I may even get to work on it later. The initial image was just a snapshot I took of my daughter from the chair I was sat in. When I reviewed it on camera, I liked her expression, so I got 'Hannah' to take one of my hand in the same place where the screen was. I then combined the two in CS3. If I'd planned it I'd like to think I might have noticed the distractions, but I can't guarantee it. Wink
dudler Plus
16 945 1520 England
17 Sep 2017 10:40AM
Others have mentioned the messy background: it would have been worth drawing the curtain, balancing hte light better, and maybe darkening hte background on the left by switching lights off or redirecting them.

My mod addresses this a little: I don't generally manipulate at all, so it is necessarily crude - but see how much more impact there is with a dark background on the right, and no curtain tie. Inicidentally, the halo issue disappears...

I think it might also be good to reduce the distance between screen/hand and face.
mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.6k 2080 United Kingdom
17 Sep 2017 12:11PM
I'm a bit late here. It's a brilliant idea, and worth reworking. Definitely simplify the background, get rid of the curtain, the hook, and also the desk lamp on the left. Just a plain wall is all that is needed.

I'm seeing a nasty blotchiness in your daughter's skin - hand, face, neck. That's possibly from considerable lightening. I would want to go back to that file, only the front of her face needs to be lit, the rest of the head can drift into dark shadow.

The hand is good, I wonder if the effect would be cleaner, simpler without the bit of sleeve? I think this is a composition where simplicity is everything, avoid all clutter.

Now it's over to you, and let us see the results!
Moira
mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.6k 2080 United Kingdom
17 Sep 2017 12:19PM
Too late to add to the above - just to expand on one point, the reason why I would like to get rid of the desk lamp as well is that compositionally your light source is the computer screen and hand, having a secondary light source complicates that effect.
dark_lord Plus
15 2.3k 591 England
17 Sep 2017 11:22PM
I'm a biot late to this one too.
The desk lamp is the brightest part of the scene and draws the eye when the attention should be on your daughter's face.
If the hand is coming out of the screen it would concievably be lit by the screen. You need to do that to add some believability to it. How you light your arm you'll need to experiment, but my first thought is that you could try an LED torch from the elbow position to give an edge lighting effect.

A very good idea (think opf this as the first draft) and worth having another go as it could work splendidly.
TanyaH Plus
16 1.3k 395 United Kingdom
18 Sep 2017 2:39PM
And I'm so late to this one that the crisps are all eaten, the lights are out and everyone's gone home Smile

However, just to reiterate what's already been said above, definitely one to rework at some point. Often, it's only after you've taken a shot (like your initial one of your daughter) that the other ideas come flooding in about how it could be changed.

The idea behind it is excellent and, sadly in this day and age, all too real as well. Sometimes, it's the visual slap in the face that images like these can convey that's needed, where tons of words are meaningless.

So all I'll offer, until I see a rework, is my own take on your wonderful image Grin

Tanya
dark_lord Plus
15 2.3k 591 England
18 Sep 2017 7:33PM
Actually I think Tanya's 'dodgy cloning' (her words, not mine) has worked wonders, such a sinister result!
dudler Plus
16 945 1520 England
19 Sep 2017 10:44AM
I agree - that's how good this can be...

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