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Bandung Hidden Gem

By pptbudi
Sindang kerta, my city view blocked by that mountain, RAW captured processing with Capture NX-D using auto tune mode

Tags: Forest Mountain Lake Landscape and travel

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mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.5k 2066 United Kingdom
11 Feb 2017 1:19PM
I like your processing, that's a nice sky, with a real sense of substance in those clouds. But...

As with your previous upload there's too much sky. I really want to see a lot more of those foreground trees - the full height of that bare tree on the right, and the full length of that diagonal slope coming in from the right, with the smaller trees on its edge. But what the image really needs is a subject, a focal point, a stronger sense of structure. A route for the eye to follow and a point of interest for it to land on.

As previously, I shall look at a much tighter crop, to make use of the pattern of diagonals in the bottom left corner. My advice would be - don't try to cram everything into the frame, looks for shapes, patterns, structure, and a focal point. Looking at a rectangle on a screen isn't like looking out of a window. You need to invite us there.

Moira

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pptbudi 3 6 Indonesia
11 Feb 2017 1:46PM
Thank you very much Moira, if I'am going lower there will be lot of weeds or short plant from the place I stand, will that be good ?, okay I will try to remember not to cram everything on the frame on next exploration, and more invite scene Smile,thank you very much again Smile, more appreciate.

Budi
banehawi Plus
15 2.1k 4021 Canada
11 Feb 2017 3:32PM
Your second shot is the much better of the two.

Compared to the original: the original has no real interest for anyone not familiar with that place; its essentially an image of trees; the second had some interest as we can see theres a bay and layers and shades of colours, so rather than an image of trees blocking a view, this one IS the view.

Same comments as I always make and same mod exactly as I always do. Even exposre for sky and land; warmer tone; sever crop of the sky.


Regards


Willie
pamelajean Plus
13 1.2k 2085 United Kingdom
11 Feb 2017 5:02PM
Your second shot is by far the better composition and because you have "layers" of close, not-so-close and far away areas, there is great depth to the image, too.
You have a lovely V-shaped dip to take us into and through the scene.

I think that you could have included less sky and consequently more of the foreground colourful foliage, which would lift the image out of the green-and-blue quite nicely.

Pamela.
mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.5k 2066 United Kingdom
11 Feb 2017 5:03PM
Yes your second shot is way better. It gives a real sense of the contours of the land, and a sense of distance.
dudler Plus
16 895 1505 England
11 Feb 2017 10:02PM
Both shots suffer from having the horizon straight across the middle...

That can work, but it usually works better to have a 2:1 ratio, though it doesn't matter which way round.

A couple of mods coming.
dark_lord Plus
15 2.3k 582 England
12 Feb 2017 8:31PM
Better in terms of exposure and detail, but even then don't be afraid to adjust the foreground and sky separately to get the best out of both.

I can understand you wanting to avoid some of the foreground that you don't like, but it can give some interest and depth to the scene. Walk around to find different angles and use the foreground to your advantage.
Alternatively, shoot as you have but crop the sky. Not every scene 'fits' the shape of the camera's sensor.
paulbroad Plus
12 131 1285 United Kingdom
13 Feb 2017 8:24AM
You need to think of content and the people viewing the image. We do not know what you know and thus, in V1 just see a lot of trees with no basic composition and thus no holding power. The second shot is streets better, but still has the same basic faults - nothing to really hold the attention of a third party viewer.

Paul
pptbudi 3 6 Indonesia
19 Feb 2017 4:36PM

Quote:Your second shot is the much better of the two.

Compared to the original: the original has no real interest for anyone not familiar with that place; its essentially an image of trees; the second had some interest as we can see theres a bay and layers and shades of colours, so rather than an image of trees blocking a view, this one IS the view.

Same comments as I always make and same mod exactly as I always do. Even exposre for sky and land; warmer tone; sever crop of the sky.


Regards


Willie



Thank you very much my friend for the lovely modification and the comments, much appreciate Smile
pptbudi 3 6 Indonesia
19 Feb 2017 4:38PM

Quote:Your second shot is by far the better composition and because you have "layers" of close, not-so-close and far away areas, there is great depth to the image, too.
You have a lovely V-shaped dip to take us into and through the scene.

I think that you could have included less sky and consequently more of the foreground colourful foliage, which would lift the image out of the green-and-blue quite nicely.

Pamela.


Thank you very much my friend for the lovely input, layers and less sky, much appreciate Smile
pptbudi 3 6 Indonesia
19 Feb 2017 4:39PM

Quote:Yes your second shot is way better. It gives a real sense of the contours of the land, and a sense of distance.

Thank you again my friend much appreciate Smile
pptbudi 3 6 Indonesia
19 Feb 2017 4:41PM

Quote:Both shots suffer from having the horizon straight across the middle...

That can work, but it usually works better to have a 2:1 ratio, though it doesn't matter which way round.

A couple of mods coming.[/quot
Quote:Both shots suffer from having the horizon straight across the middle...

That can work, but it usually works better to have a 2:1 ratio, though it doesn't matter which way round.

A couple of mods coming.


Thank you very much my friend I really like the first modification a lot, it's beautiful, ratio 1:2, land should be more than the skies, Thank you very much Smile

pptbudi 3 6 Indonesia
19 Feb 2017 4:44PM

Quote:Better in terms of exposure and detail, but even then don't be afraid to adjust the foreground and sky separately to get the best out of both.

I can understand you wanting to avoid some of the foreground that you don't like, but it can give some interest and depth to the scene. Walk around to find different angles and use the foreground to your advantage.
Alternatively, shoot as you have but crop the sky. Not every scene 'fits' the shape of the camera's sensor.



Thank you very much my friend, okay more foreground to create more depth and layers as Pamela said Smile
pptbudi 3 6 Indonesia
19 Feb 2017 4:47PM

Quote:You need to think of content and the people viewing the image. We do not know what you know and thus, in V1 just see a lot of trees with no basic composition and thus no holding power. The second shot is streets better, but still has the same basic faults - nothing to really hold the attention of a third party viewer.

Paul


Thank you very much my friend, focal point, yes it's lack or even no focal point at all, as Moira said it's cram or put everything all on the screen Smile, will try again on next shot Wink

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