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Kaitlyn

By RebeccaR
I uploaded a portrait here yesterday and got some great advice, so heres another! CC please.



Tags: Girls Portraits and people

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7 Sep 2018 10:21AM
This is a fine looking portrait Rebecca!
At first I thought nothing was wrong with it at all, but when I looked at it as my own capture, I found I was more critical (graphical background).
First I cropped of the less interesting stones & rusty metal off at the top - so it became a 3/2 size.
I personaly found that the 'green' grass looked a bit cold (perhaps too muted) so I tried to give it a more natural & warmer look.
Perhaps the vignetering is a bit too much for my liking, I mean for this young girl it seems too be (or tends too be) more gloomy, dark and mysterious looking - perhaps you wanted to create that feel... or maybe I 'm a more romantic guy...
Guy
7 Sep 2018 10:37AM
Thank you. Love the modifications I'll warm it up some.

I use ACR and ps. I don't use LR

I'll upload a warmer edit in the modifications section. See what you think
7 Sep 2018 10:48AM
Excellent original Rebecca, like the pose,
Fred.
paulbroad 13 131 1290 United Kingdom
7 Sep 2018 11:20AM
Again, a very nice shot with good tones and setting. The legs are a bit 'ordinary' in placing and jar on me a bit. Would prefer them both drawn up or a tighter crop altogether leaving the legs out. Her right hand is just hanging there with nothing to do - if both legs were drawn up, both hands could be on her kness giving rather better shape and form.

Considering this and your last shot, they are very good but lack in pose and composition. The effect is a very high quality snapshot rather than a thought out presentation. With respect - beginners posing. Look in magazines and other publications and get ideas. In my days shooting such images I had a small number of keen amateur models - they looked in magazines and publications themselves for ideas of how they wanted to look and we went from there.

Paul
7 Sep 2018 11:47AM
Thank you all, Ive added another photo from the same session in the modifications.

Ive done a completely different edit.

posing is also something I'm trying to learn, as I am used to taking lifestyle photos of children, rather than fully posed.
dudler Plus
17 1.4k 1739 England
7 Sep 2018 12:31PM
Rebecca, could you upload an unedited version, please? That would tell us a lot about what you've done in processing - some of which may not have been consciously done.

You can upload a full-size file - the site will resize and sharpen for display. And please use 'save as' so that the EXIF stays embedded.

Again, the picture, as presented, is very easy on the eye - the sort of thing a 'social photographer' might well produce for a client.

If you do a session with an experienced professional model, you may find that they inject a bit more sparkle into the pose and expression: it is hard work to bring these out of a normal person at the same time as working with the technicalities. Two separate skill sets, and working on both at once is hard work!
femape 3 Argentina
7 Sep 2018 12:41PM
Una imagen muy atractiva.
GrinGrinGrinGrin
banehawi Plus
16 2.3k 4176 Canada
7 Sep 2018 3:15PM
Very much underexposed. Spot metering will often be the cause, as getting spot metering right can be a bit of an art, requiring the spot to be neutral, and averaging multiple spots to get it right. It doesnt really work "right out of the box"

Very odd colours and white balance, especially noticeable on the grass which seems to have a lot of blue in it. Seems overly processed, - so I also would love to see an original untouched version please! You may well have processed it to achieve this exact look, but it would be great to compare.

Ive tried to address areas Ive mentioned in my mod, but seeing the original would be ideal.

The pose for me is natural for a young girl "not posing"


Regards



Willie
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.4k 2290 United Kingdom
8 Sep 2018 8:39AM
Just a suggestion to add to excellent advice above - this sort of pose can give a strong L-shape fitted into the bottom left corner of a deeper frame. For that to work at its best, avoid intrusions over the leg such as the dandelion seed heads and leaves, and make sure the vertical on the left is true.

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