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Bridge to far

By rsjkinson  
Trying to learn photography and to get good shots

Tags: Landscape and travel

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cjl47 13 5 3 England
30 Aug 2009 1:56PM
Good capture, well spotted.
chris
malc_c 15 2 167 England
30 Aug 2009 4:01PM
Richard,

You have quite an interesting image here which tells a bit of a story, but really it's more of a record shot than anything as we don't know the circumstance of the closure.

Compositionally it's a bit messy with lots of greenery around, but I don't think a mono conversion would help as it's all green anyway, but the position and angle of the bridge are fine.

Technically it looks the best part of a whole stop overexposed, but with no particularly bright highlights there isn't much burned out.

My mod tries to suppress the distraction of the green areas, but not the bridge, by blending a blurred copy with the original, creating a sort of soft focus effect. This usefully also drops the effective mid-tone exposure by a stop. Other changes are dramatically darkening the plank in the foreground, cloning out the direction signs on the bridge and darkening all the surrounding areas to concentrate the viewer's attention on the bridge.

Hope you find the mod helpful.
malcolm
Adderwatcher 12 60 19 United Kingdom
30 Aug 2009 5:41PM
You have an interesting shot but i agree with Malcolm in that its very busy. I've uploaded a mod where (on my limited software) i have reduced the brightness and increased the contrast and saturation. With the crop i tried to tidy up and cut away some of the greenery. its not as good as Malcoms (who likely used photoshop) but gives you a few ideas.
Hope this helps anyway.
Scott
Seamuscamp 13 3 10 United Kingdom
31 Aug 2009 12:55AM
Richard
The image is very flat - due to overexposure and consequent lack of contrast. The effect is to leave the observer without a subject to focus on. Malcolm's adjustments produce a subject. The problem for the photographer is that it is natural to overlay the image with the memory of what was seen. The observer doesn't have that advantage
davey_griffo 12 213 165 England
6 Sep 2009 1:31PM
A bridge too rickety, more like. You wouldn't catch me crossing that!! Smile

I agree with the others. A very nice shot, but to give it artistic merit, & make it stand out, it just needs some added sparkle.

Malc's version while superb, may be a little technical, if you are a beginer, and/or are unfamiliar with the relevant software (or in deed, don't have it).

My first impression was that it needed darkening a little, to add some mood, possibly even a spooky atmosphere, baring in mind where it is. I'd also add some contrast, and/or some saturation, though not much, as it's easy to overdo, & can look too in-your-face. I'd also warm the colour temperature a little.

Don't take all of this as criticism, though. I think that you should take heart from the fact that everyone is offering help, rather than writing off the shot altogether, & suggesting a re-shoot. You obviously have a good basic shot here, & plenty to work with, & that's not just my opinion.

Have a go yourself, if you have the software, & try posting a new version. As an E2 member, you can add it as a version to this shot, if you want to post something else tomorrow.

Above all, keep shooting & posting. People will always offer their advice to help you improve. All of us were beginers once.

A good example of this is Neeka (click link ), who also considered herself a beginer when she first posted, & through the advice of others has improved greatly (not that she was bad to start with, in fact I thought she was better than she gave herself credit for, as you are yourself).

We all can improve, no matter how good we think we are.

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