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Grandma's kitchen..

By thearmsofvenusdemilo
I have offered this one of a previous post for pro critique to see how it can be improved so Mr H et al do your worst...

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culturedcanvas 10 4.7k 59 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2008 5:00PM
Just had to re-write this as you deleted the last one Wink

Well theres not a lot wrong with this at all. The treatment suits the image nicely and gives a gritty feel overall which suits the scene.

Compositioanlly there's plenty of space between the elements in the shot which helps it retain some clarity.

Improvements? Well i might have added some ice to the tumbler and maybe used a more interesting glass to strengthen the focal point.

It might also benefit from a slight crop at the top which would make it a touch stronger compositionally in my opinion.

Dan

PS I like a Bushmills myself on occasion ...

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25 Mar 2008 5:03PM
Thats actually bloody good comment about the glass and ice!! Thanks Dan.

Colin
Milla 8 7 2 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2008 5:09PM
Yet another delightful in every bit image! You ask how can this be improved, I ask how to get so fantastic quality of work lol.
MrsS 9 4.5k 18 England
25 Mar 2008 5:36PM
ICE! ICE!!! IN BUSHMILLS????

SACRILEGE!!!


Ok! Now I've calmed down. It would improve the photographic element, but WHAT a waste! Wink

F xx

PS, already commented on this b4 so please forgive me for not giving any constructive criticism, basically as I know nerrthing Tongue
25 Mar 2008 5:50PM
ICE FOR COMPOSITION PURPOSES ONLY

Ditto Fran
25 Mar 2008 6:22PM
Good old Grandma.. she knows what warms the cockles...!!!!
Plus taste in china Plates.. winks..!

perspective of " Bushmills " Superb.. !!! chin chin !!

Nikki !
randomrubble 11 3.0k 12 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2008 6:26PM
One thought that's not yet been mentioned, I'd like to see you lose the curtain pole that pops on at the top right.
25 Mar 2008 6:31PM
Nice old world feel about it but I do agree about the curtain pole
Glynnis
MickyMc 8 8 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2008 6:38PM
It has great atmosphere and stirs those old grey cells
Mavis
redstag 10 100 15 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2008 6:39PM
A superb image, but, even for compositional purposes, you can't put ice in Bushmills, I'm with Fran!
ta for the PM.

Jon
chinny 11 492 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2008 6:45PM
Wonderful !!
luxaeternam 9 21 1
25 Mar 2008 7:10PM
Please send me grandma's address!
Love this, and I'm frustrated because I wanted to shortlist it...
Smile Lucy
POOCHIE 10 21 6 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2008 7:46PM
Nobody does HDR quite like you in my opinion and you certainly inspired me to give it ago recently, I always like your subject matter, I wonder what sort of shot you would have got if you had drank the bottle ? great shot anyway.

Pooch.
DP_Imagery Plus
11 24 6 Wales
25 Mar 2008 10:46PM
Change the bottle of Bushmills (a fine enough drop though it is) for a bottle of Jamesons Crested 10 and you have a perfect image . . . but definitely no ice - not even for photographic purposes (I mean you are going to have to drink it after taking the photo are you not!) Seriously though - your HDR technique is so perfect your images don't 'look' like HDR - just look like very beautiful photographs. Heartwarming stuff. Bruce
wasper Plus
10 533 1 Ireland
27 Mar 2008 12:05PM
How about a Cuban cigar to add a Churchlian atmosphere.
ade_mcfade 12 15.2k 216 England
27 Mar 2008 3:39PM
oodles of character and interest in here - Dan's pretty much beaten us all to the main points.

I agree that you could loose the top of the shot - a bit above the dresser maybe? it just seems so empty at the top compared to the lower parts

Can't really think of much else I'd change - it's your own distinct style and it works
Nick_w Plus
9 4.2k 99 England
27 Mar 2008 6:36PM
I love the style to your shots, yes maybe too much empty space at the top, and if I'm been realy critical the bucket on the RHS has just been clipped, but thats been very picky.
Eviscera 10 1.1k 149 United Kingdom
27 Mar 2008 10:38PM
well , cant quite quite decide if the behind the back of the chair (webby effect) is stuck to it or part of the b.g. Just a slight distracting textural and/ or highlight.

doesnt detract from the mood though !

Dave
28 Mar 2008 6:17PM
Thanks to the crit team Barry and Ade , some food for thought, and thanks to everyone else Scorcher Gltnis, Mavis,Jon, Poochie, Bruce, Khamas, Nick and Dave all very useful stuff cheers guys..

Colin
28 Mar 2008 6:17PM
Thanks also Milla!!

Colin
28 Mar 2008 6:28PM
Thanks Lucy and Paul appreciate your comments

Colin
SueTurner 11 81 3 England
29 Mar 2008 12:30AM
the only thing what I think could be improved on this excellent shot is I dont like the black blobs (to the right of the blue plate and above the little clock) find my eye is drawn there looks like someone has sprayed a load of black paint there, and if being really picky clone out that (looks like part of a curtain rail) sticking in about a third down on the right hand side - apart from that it is a very clever well thought out shot, with very good manipulation.

Sue
30 Mar 2008 9:57AM
Thanks Sue, good points, although the black blobs are actually burn marks from the oil lamp!

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