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Lost in Translation

By wildatheart  
This I created from an image taken of people in the New York Subway and the homeless/tramps on the streets above. 'Lost in Translation', the homeless living on the streets, taking away colour and light in their dark lives. Lost in a world of poverty, neglect and antipathy. I am going to enter this in a local camera club competition so would appreciate helpful critique and suggestions. Many thanks...

Tags: New york People Subway Digitally manipulated Portraits and people

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johnlw 13 1 10 United Kingdom
26 Oct 2013 10:37PM
A good image it shows the stark contrasts of people with and those without a life.
Regards John.

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26 Oct 2013 10:43PM
Thank you John, yes this is exactly what I was hoping to portray.
AnneB50 7 118 18 Scotland
26 Oct 2013 10:49PM
John is right, this shows a real contrast between the haves and have nots and the lower layer shows the homeless almost as an underclass, which in many ways they have become. The only thing I would say is that you need to show some real interest and contrast in each of the sections for example, I'm not quite sure what is happening in the 4th section above and the second below. Of course part of the mystery might just be to get us thinking!

Anne
26 Oct 2013 10:57PM
Yes Anne, I wanted that affect, the top part of the image was 'as taken', so purely as was seen, hoping to show the lives of people carrying on in naive ignorance. Thank you again, I will take on your comments.
banehawi Plus
15 2.2k 4083 Canada
26 Oct 2013 11:16PM
This is excellent.

I would suggest a modification that makes the central steel column narrower, by selecting the right hand side and moving it left, and ensuring the column is the same width as others. I know its as shot, but its so wide it splits this single image into two images. Each one could work on its own I think. Take a look at the mod and see if you think it makes a difference. Ive also added some contrast to the people below to give them a little more impact. Thats all I can suggest. It makes its point.

Very nice piece.


regards



Willie
27 Oct 2013 8:38AM
Thanks Willie, I really think the suggestion for splitting the central column works brilliantly! and will also add contrast to the people below... as usual excellent advice and mod, thank you.
Alison
mrswoolybill Plus
13 1.8k 2142 United Kingdom
28 Oct 2013 1:10PM
This is excellent, particularly with Willie's Modification. What I like is the way that the very precise formal framing focuses attention on small cameos of life. Above and below the social divide. The frame also creates an objective, dispassionate feel. We look, we compare, we don't judge.
Moira
28 Oct 2013 1:37PM
Thank you so much Moira, I have updated the image with Willies suggestions and loaded the new version on here which I am very pleased about! I was impressed with the words you used to describe the image, I am glad it conveys the emotion intended. Many thanks again.

Alison

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