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By youmightlikethis
three versions of much the same scene how could I improve them

Tags: Photo journalism General Portraits and people

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chase 12 1.1k 246 England
25 Apr 2014 7:11PM
A nice set of images but...which one would you like us to critique in depth for improvement ? What,if any are your concerns ?

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thanks for crit and mod
dark_lord Plus
14 2.1k 538 England
25 Apr 2014 8:19PM
I shall provide input for V1.

Superb timing to get the pose and expression, a very good example of candid photography.
Colin's mod has improved the colour.

The red clothing in the background is a distraction, unfortunate as to the timing when someone walks by. I've uploaded a mod where i made a rough selection and just reduced the lightness of just the red channel. The same could be done with the green, but you should get the idea. I also boosted the overall contrast as it lacked visual punch despite being 'the moment'.

This is also a good candidate for the mono treatment, which given your other uploads I thought you might have tried here, so again I've aded a mod.

mrswoolybill Plus
11 1.2k 1929 United Kingdom
25 Apr 2014 8:58PM
V1 - you have a very attractive image of social interaction. People do still talk to each other... I like the balance of profile and 3/4 face, and the hand gestures.

Keith has mentioned the red and green 'bits' at the top, they are a problem simply because they spoil the overall balance and draw the viewer's eye away from what really matters. Just a local application of the Sponge tool is all that's needed.

The image looks slightly over-sharpened on the right, if you look at the cracks in the stonework they seem almost detached from the stone itself. I'd like to add a hint of blur to the background. Modification to follow...

My other reservation is that the crop is a bit too tight. I would like just a little more space all round - the lass on the left's heel is digging into the edge of the frame. Two reasons for more space - this is about the street, not some cramped back room; plus allowing a little more space is more respectful, less intrusive.

I like the other two but the CG isn't a 1st, 2nd, 3rd beauty pageant, it would make more sense to upload images separately for critique - with maybe the original file plus the processed image as Before & after.

banehawi Plus
13 1.8k 3881 Canada
25 Apr 2014 10:19PM
V1 is cropped from a larger image, and since the original one is shot at ISO 400, there is significant noise clearly visible all through it.

I like the pose, timing, interaction, but would either do your mono thing, or reduce the noise, in addition to the distractions at the top.

The older shots will usually have similar issues we will see. Like the -1, etc. so if you concentrate on newer stuff, and youve uploaded a number of very nice ones, it would be nice.


banehawi Plus
13 1.8k 3881 Canada
25 Apr 2014 10:37PM
Loaded a quick mod, straightened (its a little off vertical), colour balance, exposure noise.

paulbroad 10 123 1245 United Kingdom
26 Apr 2014 9:00AM
You really should do more of the V1 and V2 and less of the v3. The first two are very good with interest, frame filling and good tones. The third, whilst quality is good, is a general image with little compositional thought. The presentation too, is not to my liking. I see no point in the caption.

I know it's just me being subjective, but you really do produce some excellent shots when you get in close and don't much about with the quality.


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